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Fare Price (Final Version)

by Wakeboarder20

Member since 2005 · Posted 18 Sep 2006 · Edited 30 Oct 2006 · 7 comments

Let us not think about difficult things but let us find ways to ease our suffering. Let us not think of the nature of God. But let us sell His image and reputation for a fare price of course. Maybe write a book full of complaints arguing the state of trendy things and whether this and that is Christ-like. Maybe sell a shirt or a coat put a cross on it with some scripture. We’ll sell millions, but at a fare price of course. Let us not think of ourselves but let us think of His love and grace. Let us not just embrace that love and grace but sell it to the world for a fare price.

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[8] Ranger 19-Sep-06/8:05 AM Reply
If I remember rightly, I quite liked the original. Decent enough edit, although I can never quite be sure whether you're religious or not.
[n/a] Wakeboarder20 › Ranger 19-Sep-06/10:39 PM Reply
Well I guess that depends on how you look at it and whether you're asking if the poem is religious or I'm religious myself. I am religious but I'd say I'm more spiritual then religious. I sort of look at religion as a tool of spirituality. As for the poem, it's probably religious...sort of. Actually, it's more of an anti-commercialization-of-Christianity which just happens to be done by those who are, usually, very religious.
[6] colbaby 20-Sep-06/5:09 AM Reply
Too true. Our actions speak louder than words, or poems. Of course, we're right and they're wrong. That will be $100 for the consultation, thank you very much. Fare Price (Revised) reminds me of the folly of serving two masters. I like it.
[7] ecargo 20-Sep-06/10:16 AM Reply
"Fare price" as in a pun on fair with the connotation of travel (i.e., to heaven)? If so, it might be a little overplayed with 3 repetitions as well as the title.

It is a good topic for poetic examination. I wrote an Xmas poem once like this, something like "you'd think these shelves held souls--buy now! We'll throw in sanctity/and absolution, absolutely free!" So I get what you're saying here, I think.

[5] half.italian 31-Oct-06/4:05 AM Reply
If you think your religion/church is so blood sucking than why do you still follow it? Or have you recently left a church? I have never practiced religion for these obvious reasons. Spirituality > Religion. Find a unique way to say it instead of staing the obvious.
[6] Dovina 31-Oct-06/10:54 AM Reply

Fare price, as in a ticket to Heaven, is meant, I presume, as criticism of the church for wanting money for such passage. It's acommon theme, and not too well presented here. I'd rather see a juxteposition of "fare" and "fair."
[n/a] wilco › Dovina 2-Nov-06/6:33 PM Reply
I'll never understand all these poverty stricken people giving all the money they can to the church so their pastor can drive a Lexus. Sad.