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Fare Price (Final Version) (Free verse) by Wakeboarder20 Let us not think about difficult things
but let us find ways to ease our suffering.
Let us not think of the nature of God.
But let us sell His image and reputation
for a fare price of course.
Maybe write a book full of complaints
arguing the state of trendy things and
whether this and that is Christ-like.
Maybe sell a shirt or a coat
put a cross on it with some scripture.
Weâll sell millions,
but at a fare price of course.
Let us not think of ourselves
but let us think of His love and grace.
Let us not just embrace that love and grace
but sell it to the world for a fare price.
Up the ladder:
The Little Mouse That Roared
Down the ladder:
Stream of Consciousness (#1)
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Posted: September 18, 2006 9:58 PM PDT; Last modified: October 30, 2006 2:55 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.8410625 Overall Rank: 10719 Comments:
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Ranger @ 81.158.153.90
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19-Sep-06/8:05 AM
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If I remember rightly, I quite liked the original. Decent enough edit, although I can never quite be sure whether you're religious or not.
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Wakeboarder20 @ 71.227.248.140
> Ranger
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19-Sep-06/10:39 PM
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Well I guess that depends on how you look at it and whether you're asking if the poem is religious or I'm religious myself. I am religious but I'd say I'm more spiritual then religious. I sort of look at religion as a tool of spirituality. As for the poem, it's probably religious...sort of. Actually, it's more of an anti-commercialization-of-Christianity which just happens to be done by those who are, usually, very religious.
Too true. Our actions speak louder than words, or poems. Of course, we're right and they're wrong. That will be $100 for the consultation, thank you very much. Fare Price (Revised) reminds me of the folly of serving two masters. I like it.
"Fare price" as in a pun on fair with the connotation of travel (i.e., to heaven)? If so, it might be a little overplayed with 3 repetitions as well as the title.
It is a good topic for poetic examination. I wrote an Xmas poem once like this, something like "you'd think these shelves held souls--buy now! We'll throw in sanctity/and absolution, absolutely free!" So I get what you're saying here, I think.
If you think your religion/church is so blood sucking than why do you still follow it? Or have you recently left a church? I have never practiced religion for these obvious reasons. Spirituality > Religion. Find a unique way to say it instead of staing the obvious.
Fare price, as in a ticket to Heaven, is meant, I presume, as criticism of the church for wanting money for such passage. It's acommon theme, and not too well presented here. I'd rather see a juxteposition of "fare" and "fair."
I'll never understand all these poverty stricken people giving all the money they can to the church so their pastor can drive a Lexus. Sad.
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