Yep ! sure floured my apron

Do you hear that? That's a one armed bum fucking a stale donut in a agreement somewhere in AMERICA!

A bowl of solid gravy.

retard

You are a master of the chill! I thought at first dipsy kismet and then I thought stalker and then back to fate. Delicious bit of (I thought Irony, but that certainly is not the word.)

Epic, romantic, a nuance fest.

i so cracked up at the last 2 lines of S4. very modest but my mark sir is not - 8

i'm knackered but some bits i likey and some bits i had to pinch myself to check i was in the same poem/prose/ thingy. Meagan sounds cute.

I see your still producing Mills and Boon backjackets. Your talent makes me sick. 10 out of 10 10 out of 10 10 out of 1010 out of 10 ctrl v ad nauseum

I am disgusted to the extreme with this character. Mayhaps sympathy was trying to be evoked. I did not feel it.

I don't think it deserves the crap mark of 4. I can see you've give it a shot, maybe you mean dank and not dang? think you need to edit. Naughty rabbit. 6

the poem bites but the title sucks like a long distance lover 6

7 even

De Ja vous but i like it

What i don't understand i have felt and this cryptic comment you will find i like it -8

first verse is the best, a very eccentric rhyming scheme but it seems to work. A small criticism is the use of a narrative too much, rather than setting the scene and letting the reader infer. When the poet takes the interpetation away from the reader, the reader feels like he is prying. Other than that good stuff

I like it. . . I just don't get what you are saying in the 4th and 5th to last lines. . .8

Robert Johnson's "Phonograph blues". (That's what I was listening to while just reading this). How are you? I missed you.

"the day children killed Jesus's great grandson." I would drop this line altogether, and end at the line before it.

Yep, this comes through loud and clear and passionate. Woof!