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Never Love A Poet (Free verse) by Caducus
Hours slumber
Silence becomes tangible
And the oscillating pendulum mocks me.
If sheâd lost my number
That would be understandable,
I want to call her,
Yet pride stops me.
Intimacy distanced me from you
Does my love have to be spoken to be true?
Feelings are sometimes like poetry,
They cannot be explained,
Like the times youâd say no to me.
My feelings are like metaphors,
When you look at me,
I must feel seen,
And Iâll open my doors and share with you my dreams.
There are many like me,
Yet I am unique,
My mind is strong,
But my hearts so weak.
She called me and was crying.
I annoyed her by being civilized,
Our love was dying,
But I never realized.
Just for once say you love me she said,
So I uttered the 3 words she had waited so long for,
But it was to late the line went dead.
So I had told these 3 words to silence,
Somewhat of an irony
The one thing she hated about me,
Was on the line to me.
I wonder how well people really know one another,
Sibling to sibling,
Lover to lover.
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.7615943
Overall Rank: 448
Posted: October 9, 2003 8:29 AM PDT; Last modified: October 9, 2003 8:29 AM PDT
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A small criticism is the use of a narrative too much, rather than setting the scene and letting the reader infer. When the poet takes the interpetation away from the reader, the reader feels like he is prying.
Other than that good stuff