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Erect Tongue of Excite

by LuckyJoe

Member since 2003 · Posted 8 Oct 2003 · 5 comments

Came forth drawn by attraction, Retracted hearing rough terrain, Thought vocal impediment was retardation. Sound not smooth as silk, But the message sooths the soul, Found that out after walking away. An erect tongue filled with excite, Stammers and stutters, Words don’t come out right. Calm and collective, In the office words pronounces right, Sentences formed without a fight. Forth coming chance number two, Touch caused your entice, Tongue again erect with excite. Upon quivering lip bite, All effort forth to talk correct, Express freely without neglect.

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[10] Druid_Girl_1984 8-Oct-03/12:49 PM Reply
i love the rhymes. very good KC lllooovveee it!! yes i had too much cafine. hehehe = )
[8] horus8 9-Oct-03/8:12 AM Reply
A bowl of solid gravy.
[n/a] LuckyJoe › horus8 10-Oct-03/1:45 AM Reply
Is that a good thing of a bad thing? I'd think it was a good thing gone bad. Solid gravy that is.
[7] Caducus 9-Oct-03/8:48 AM Reply
the poem bites but the title sucks like a long distance lover 6
[7] Caducus 9-Oct-03/8:48 AM Reply
7 even