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you (Free verse) by killingjuliet
you do not sparkle like the rest you wear no cloak of ivory upon your chest i rake the garden of dandelion and weed and there i found your seed you are what i need. you do not strive to embrace or enjoy you do not seek attention of others employ you do not bring me to my knees you do not lie or moan or grieve and i think you are just what i need... you are simple enough to rest while i struggle and digress your eyes are bright as midday sun your skin is plain, your song unsung you are only common at best but that's enough to pass my test - a feat of iron will and jest i rake the garden of dandelion and weed and there i found your seed among the honey and the bees twisted in the lilac and the trees - and you are what i need.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 5.6723537
Overall Rank: 2050
Posted: May 30, 2004 12:33 AM PDT; Last modified: May 30, 2004 12:33 AM PDT
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[9] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 | 30-May-04/4:42 AM | Reply
Hi, welcome to poemranker, and stellar poem! I've developed a really ultra-stellar tool to help budding poets in their writing, and posted it at this URL: http://tinyurl.com/ywr5z. Good luck and keep up the stellar work!
[10] sliver @ 66.87.134.129 | 30-May-04/6:47 AM | Reply
This one I like. good images, and I can almost smell the lilac.10
[9] titan69 @ 62.31.24.32 | 30-May-04/11:20 AM | Reply
yer like it good poem 9/10
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