Needs a few clues as to what actions were wrong

A human life is six feet deep is not very subtle, and water licks the concrete I would associate with the shallow end (certainly not the deep end only). Other than that very good, especially the flow and line breaks.

stain, moves house to house? Do you have a mobile you hang on the lampshade? And it is not a stain but a shadow. Yes? The last couple of lines are funny

Long Time Gone

good this, my favourite lines being: 'unfortunate in their isolation/of any form of education.' and 'beating immigrants with broken English'

good play with words, needs more though

kill crimson

jigsaw surely, could do with a dictionary though, the spelling is offputting (unless it is some anti-war message).

The art upon your face is too vague. Art can be elephant dung paintings, a pickled cow, a picasso!! Scrap I embrace my own body, it distracts the ready. A pleasant fuzzy tone though

Felt the worst? not too bad Robb, it could stand to flow more smoothly I think.

I can see the picture you've painted, but why a hacksaw? What metal is he cutting?

Lots of really nice imagery. I like the sun cradled by branches and ref. to crossed legs of a cow - nice way to express that black branches white body thing birches do. Maybe "calf" would express a thinner body?? At first I thought it was "crow", and I liked that for different reasons (easy way to show lots of small branches) - so, an option, I guess (I might use that!). Hacksaw? Though you may be expressing a sarcstic point of view, universally bonsai refers to growing a plant or a tree in a dish or shallow pot (thats what the word means) - so, I'm having trouble with the title. Forgive my rambling (again), but I could live with the title if the ranger were to make a very small cut with clippers or something, even on a full sized tree - in this way you could keep all of your well-made scenery. Hey, maybe add a modifier to the title to compensate for the context?

Like the first three verses. Interesting, seems to be alluding to the perception of an artist - the surreal (L2) and abstract (the sunset in L8) becoming synonymous, so too dreams (L1) and the painting of a sunset. Of course if you replaced real with natural world, then it would not be an artists painting at all.

changed the hacksaw in edit

loose the "his" and make a change to "corrects a branch" (singular is more powerful here, methinks; adds to the implied perfection)

dung

Any of the following titles will be fine: Flatulent Zombie III Risen Dung Astro-turd The Brown Awakening Soiled Ambulations The Thomas Brown Affair

Well at least someone around here is enjoying themselves.

You sure have a way of inventing your own niche.

Yeah, that'll work.