devilishnutcase
on Junk by Bonehiss
6 Jan 2004, 11:19 PM
You lack balls ,but I must add fuck would be a better option for you.
what crack _are_ you smoking? or whose?
Very captivating,you publish any books of sorts ?
When I read the title, I actually thought it might be about beaks. Needless to say I was jolly excited; but then it turned out that you just couldn't spell "break", and instead I had to read a poeme that contained the word "moment" far too many times. Thanks.
And now my simple mind will begin to attempt to comprehend, although I'm sure it's worthy of a ten, I will stay my voting hand 'till I truly understand.
Okay, first off, I'm not a guy. I'm most definately a girl...but that's not the point. I just want to clear some things up about this poem since everybody seems to be so up in arms about the damn thing. Let's make this clear, this is *just* a poem. What people may interpret from the contents is thier right, but do not berate them for it. Yes, I understand that at first glance I seem to be 'bashing' God. I never did that. The lines "Your God is a lie/Your God is a fake" are refering to that persons ideal of thier God. Contents of this poem are for those who feel that they must push thier beliefs onto others in an attempt to make thier logic appear concrete. It is quite illogical for an all-powerful being to be able to make our lives better just because we believe in him. From a logical standpoint, it doesn't make sense. Note, nowhere have I discredited God's existence or blatently ridiculed anybody for thier beliefs.
Secondly, I never stated that I was molested as a child. If you happened to read my poem and discern that fact, then I am grateful that you may have been able to somehow relate to my poem. I appologize if I have misslead anyone.
I am very saddened that this forum was not used as a place for *constructive* criticism for my poetry, but a place where others are subjected to malice for thier beliefs.
certainly a lot of fuck. repetition is annoying, forced rhymes hurt, painfully cliched, couldn't find any sort of flow or rhythm... this should be 'pimple poem' instead of 'free verse'.
fuck?
May i quench my thirst with your gatorade?
The only problem I have is
The complete lack of astronomical knowledge you have.
We live in the age of the 'spirit' rover now honey.
Screw the moon and the stars.
Write about Uranus and Pluto
and How they interact with my ass
Fuck you for posting this
Fuck carson daly
Fuck my computer speakers
lovely
the kindergarten ryhmes realy put me into the scene
lol?
I give you 6*
Too much "give me" repetition
* just so you don't kill urself
But I won't
Give you a knife
UGH!
Such a Disgusting Retarded Poem!
Stop WRITING!
gross.
having the spinach and the vitamin first was just plain evil.
I like how you suckered me into the rythm of it - but I could do without the last line.
Are you sure he sleeps with the fish??
more.