silk purse corset hints of my covered self's inner nudity

What do the dreadful curtains symbolise, and are they dreadful because the match the sofa?

yep. Thats a tinkertoy for the mind; was a fun one.

Made a visit to a note from god today, did ya? "winturd night" is awesomely coined. This one rocks (dude).

Everyone thinks it...you wrote it...Outstanding

It's a poem about hiding because I don't want someone to take away what I have, and the light is symbolizing this person

Shame it could not end with a one legged cow falling from the sky. Nevertheless the wordplay is very good. Off center/ cantor , in the heart in his heart, stilt shod circus clowns. Reads very well too.

instrument of sin? coyly CLS

'let me grow to satisfy your will/ take this swelling innocence'. Are you crystal lane swift in disguise?!

This is perfectly alright.

So many articles and pronouns, so little space ... This thing almost takes off, but then it's gets hobbled by so many "the"s and "our"s and "we"s -- let it go free my blue-eyed tattooed lass - Pour acid apon it and see the weak words run away; the stong will survive. let it free.

LoL - I saw the title and a first thought it said "Peeing Sun", then had a little adolescent laugh, opened the poem - and saw "snow". Yeah, I need to grow up. Ahem, okay. I like the peeping tom angle. I will write you an... hmmm... theres the top circle... now, left side... around the top: the bottom circle - a bright vitamin enhanced "8". I see richa has added a haiku too - I will add to yours then in the renga tradition: Blanket of the snow, covers earths naked beauty from the peeping sun. white satin coolness adorns, hillsides of crocus asleep. Sunshine's fingertips reach from afar but dare not - hides behind mountains.

Well, I wouldn't go as far to say it is CLSish for two reasons, one - you actually say something here that is between the lines, two - I've read some of your other stuff and I know you are not of her ilk (but I can see how richa think so). Yours is more of a soldiers perspective, where her's is more of a - child. So, this one: a few line breaks and line spacings would help quite a bit, imho. I suppose you stuck the lone period in there and ommitted any other punctuation for a reason - not feeling it. The string of capitals feels anagramatic... which would be interesting. I like "They did not invite me", btw.

The end is very good, and points for using a dictionary.com "word of the day" (this has been a paid advertisement).

I thought this was going to be a celebration of the 80s metal band 'Grave Digger'. Fuck you.

If you could point out spelilng errors that would help. Thanks.

I dont know why I put this on here but o-well.

Maybe it was to get constructive criticism and improve? Nah... ---- "Seriously, sort out the spelling." - a comment by richa on Disabilities (Free verse) by nothingtoanyone. "The poem, while not a bad concept, is quite poorly written and grammatically incorrect" - comment by NanceXToo on The First Artifical Insemination (Free verse) by nothingtoanyone. "The rhythm is too disrupted, too many words repeated, the third verse conclusion doesn't track with the argument" - comment by richa on Just a Day (Free verse) by nothingtoanyone. "less telling, more showing -5-" - comment by Shuushin on Rest (Free verse) by nothingtoanyone. "I'm not sure if your misspelling is intentional or not, but saddened, beatless,radiance, and of course heart. other than that I like the visual image the poem displays, but the misspelling and punctuation seems to take it away, distracting" - comment by NoSage on Left Empty (Free verse) by nothingtoanyone.

A legend is born, "The Beard'd Turde Cutter".