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Gods Musician: Grave Digger (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
Ah, whispering wind... speak your secrets and my beak shall cry out in song to deliver the riddle. I am your musician, with but a fiddle to lure sheep to fire. Heat causing them to sweat... But alas, they won't let me shave their wool. So I left them in puddles of blood. I became a wolf, no longer a saint... Paint covers the walls with a shade of crimson: My disease to please wandering eyes, looking down from the skies. Each lamb dies... Every soul tries only to fail and wail in horror as I curse them, spitting phlegm in their face: The mark of cain. Black rain has descended my brush rusted, dull father, is your stomach full?

Up the ladder: Ode to a Fox Cub
Down the ladder: confused

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.537883
Overall Rank: 2575
Posted: July 28, 2003 12:44 AM PDT; Last modified: July 28, 2003 12:44 AM PDT
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[n/a] <~> @ | 28-Jul-03/9:21 AM | Reply
too many metaphors here, fighting each other.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ > <~> | 28-Jul-03/12:45 PM | Reply
oops.. so i went to far?.. fuck.. and i liked this piece too ;/ hrmm.. ill scratch my head and meditate on it. thanks for the comment.
[7] richa @ | 29-Jul-03/9:23 AM | Reply
some nice lines, a bit schizophrenic skipping from one line to the next without reference to any central theme.

the simple rhyming is not really needed the structure is good as it is
[10] sliver @ | 6-Nov-03/4:43 PM | Reply
Wow, I need to read more of your stuff, This is Excellent.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ | 22-Feb-04/7:16 AM | Reply
I thought this was going to be a celebration of the 80s metal band 'Grave Digger'. Fuck you.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 13-Mar-04/1:46 AM | Reply
You know, you've just revealed that you actually go through my archives, I'm amazed. But anyway, I've never heard of that band, and if I'm going to write something about a band or a pop singer, it would most likely be a parody about Britney Spears Wardrobe and her false claims concerning her "virginity". But I doubt I'd ever get around to that anytime soon.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ > SupremeDreamer | 14-Mar-04/5:34 AM | Reply
Not to dishearten you old bean, but I was actually searching for all poemes with 'God', 'Angel', 'Love' or 'Above' in their titles in order to complete the Love-Above Liste. Cheers! -10-
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