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confused (Free verse) by windlessbreez they tell you what would make you happy,
but if you dont listen to your friends,
what kind of friend are you?
dont your friends know you best?
or are you a little confused?
you dont want to accept whats true,
you choose to stay in the past,
only to find out you were wrong,
and now the best choice has gone,
trying to move on,
leaving you behind,
slowly walking away,
leaving you confused,
now what do you say...?
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Posted: September 20, 2003 9:08 PM PDT; Last modified: September 20, 2003 9:08 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.537883 Overall Rank: 2577 Comments:
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[_] AABB rhyming scheme
[_] About romantic love
[_] About writing
[_] About suicide or self-mutilation
[_] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[_] Autobiographical but in the third person
[X] Clerical errors
[_] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, pits of despair)
[_] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart)
[_] 'Depression' words (putrid, wretched, darkness)
[X] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments
[X] Devoid of rhyme
[X] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices
[X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery
[_] Drug reference
[_] Elves, unicorns, etc.
[_] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Internet shorthand or emoticons
[_] Leaving rant
[X] Lower case only
[_] 'Lyrics'
[_] Melodramatic
[_] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[X] Overabundance of ellipses
[X] Pointedly unanswered questions
[_] Rage against the machine
[_] Reference to the author's 'social life'
[_] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_] Sanctimonious
[X] Self-obsessed
[_] Sentimental
[_] Smugly-named protagonist
[_] Thesaurophilia
[_] Untitled
[_] Vicarious wish fulfilment
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