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Peeping Sun (Haiku) by dreamsdiefirst Blanket of the snow,
covers earths naked beauty
from the peeping sun.
Up the ladder:
my unicorn
Down the ladder:
vampirism extrapolated
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
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Posted: February 22, 2004 2:23 AM PST; Last modified: February 22, 2004 2:23 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0238404 Overall Rank: 7410 Comments:
LoL - I saw the title and a first thought it said
"Peeing Sun", then had a little adolescent laugh, opened the poem - and saw "snow". Yeah, I need to grow up. Ahem, okay. I like the peeping tom angle. I will write you an... hmmm... theres the top circle... now, left side... around the top: the bottom circle - a bright vitamin enhanced "8". I see richa has added a haiku too - I will add to yours then in the renga tradition: Blanket of the snow, covers earths naked beauty from the peeping sun. white satin coolness adorns, hillsides of crocus asleep. Sunshine's fingertips reach from afar but dare not - hides behind mountains. 130 view(s)
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hints of my covered self's
inner nudity