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Peeping Sun (Haiku) by dreamsdiefirst

Blanket of the snow, covers earths naked beauty from the peeping sun.

Shuushin 22-Feb-04/5:46 AM
LoL - I saw the title and a first thought it said

"Peeing Sun", then had a little adolescent laugh, opened the poem - and saw "snow".

Yeah, I need to grow up.

Ahem, okay. I like the peeping tom angle.

I will write you an... hmmm... theres the top circle... now,
left side... around the top: the bottom circle -
a bright vitamin enhanced "8".

I see richa has added a haiku too - I will add to yours then in the renga tradition:

Blanket of the snow,
covers earths naked beauty
from the peeping sun.
white satin coolness adorns,
hillsides of crocus asleep.

Sunshine's fingertips
reach from afar but dare not -
hides behind mountains.




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