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A Dream

Member since 2004 · Posted 20 Feb 2004 · 5 comments

Now it is night. I can see the stars. The moon shines down on my face. I'm now illuminated, pale enough to be a spirit. My black hair adds to the white. I must be the forest spirit I always dream of. The green splash in my eyes indicates foliage. Hollow but full. Sleep till morning. Drifting then Gone.

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[4] devina 21-Feb-04/3:59 AM Reply

ItÂ´s okey, but....

[n/a] DarkThirteens 22-Feb-04/10:54 AM Reply

If you could point out spelilng errors that would help. Thanks.

[n/a] richa › DarkThirteens 22-Feb-04/11:32 AM Reply

The comment was in response to a mispelled comment by devina. I can't see any obvious mispelling in your piece.

Gone -- why is it capitalised.

[n/a] horus8 22-Feb-04/4:34 PM Reply

You spelled 'Cream' "Dream" for one.

And 'Monkey Fluff', "foilage", but I thought that was brilliant.

[n/a] DarkThirteens 23-Feb-04/6:53 PM Reply

Thanks Horus! lol
I capitalized Gone because I thought it would put more of a punch on the ending? I'm just beginning and trying new things. I'm open to ideas.