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A Dream (Free verse) by DarkThirteens

Now it is night. I can see the stars. The moon shines down on my face. I'm now illuminated, pale enough to be a spirit. My black hair adds to the white. I must be the forest spirit I always dream of. The green splash in my eyes indicates foliage. Hollow but full. Sleep till morning. Drifting then Gone.

horus8 22-Feb-04/4:34 PM
You spelled 'Cream' "Dream" for one.

And 'Monkey Fluff', "foilage", but I thought that was brilliant.




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