Dan garcia-Black
on A Flower for Monet by Shuushin
30 Mar 2004, 10:32 AM
Impressive.
Sentimentally moving. But why Monet?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
30 Mar 2004, 10:45 AM
This is your best yet!
I don't get it either, but it sure does ring nice. It it ok to like it just for it's ring? If so 9.
very IMPRESSIONable
HEY guys, THANKS. Been in training most of the day and I popped out to check messages - horry cow.
Thanks for the good words - much appreciated!!
"It's all I have"
This inconsistant meter would be hard to sing.
Such sadness.
a thousand points for calling a duck a duck (senryu vs haiku).
tanka you.
What are we looking for? A little more intrigue perhaps?
This poem only touches the surface of the emotions you are feeling...go deeper you can do better
Lovely words, and I must agree. We are.
Some good sentiment, especially, "I've burned every bridge . . .only to spend the next few weeks rebuilding everything."
Interesting to say the least. Which I'm not known for that. I enjoyed it, and admit it, who wouldn't? It was off the wall and lacking a bit in grammer(But hey like most poets from the before the 20s aren't). -9-
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thepinkbunnyofdoom
on I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer
30 Mar 2004, 12:42 PM
Much Improvement! I am indeed impressed. -10-
Wonderful.
reminds me of an old friendship that went to hell