Re: Love by ChefKSP	9-Sep-04/6:25 PM
Aww. How distinctively pathetic. Your Revealed feelings only prolongs the time till your heart is broken once again?? What the fuck is that? I believe you meant "prolong" and not "prolongs." Actually, you might want to take that whole line out. Or maybe you want to take the whole stanza; it adds nothing to the poem. Actually, just take out the entire poem. It adds nothing to this site.
Re: Forever Lasting by ChefKSP	9-Sep-04/6:29 PM
Life without love is a life's loss????? God. Look, Chef, why don't you send this dribble you cooked up to Chicken Soup for the Teenage Soul XXXVII. I believe they have an opening, as they always do, for shit that rambles, rhymes, and really means absolutely nothing. Go ahead. You're hurting the internet.
Re: Friend Ship by ChefKSP	9-Sep-04/6:31 PM
When you'll find love? mind if I go hurl in the next room. YEUCH!!! Shit you're bad. This is the most sappy stuff I've read in a long time.
Re: Im Scared by crystal4	9-Sep-04/6:37 PM
Any poem that has the words "and nobody cares" or "I need someone" or "I'm the only one" or really any line in this poem, is a hopeless cliché. I'm sorry a member of your family has died. But this poem is terrible
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Sep-04/4:55 PM
Baaaaaad lintyweenis.. No self voting. Tsktsk
Re: Welsh Landscape Part One by Nicholas Jones	16-Sep-04/9:49 AM
Rydw i'n cytuno. Does dim gan yr uwchdônau marw unrhyw ddihangfa. Rydw i'n credu bod i ddim wedi gofyn, oes yn well gen ti Saesneg neu Gymraeg?
Re: School (a sonnet) by Nicholas Jones	16-Sep-04/9:55 AM
Wyt ti wedi ddarllen "Ty'r ysgol" gan T. H Parry Williams? Mae'n amddangos bod y gerdd hyn yn ateb yn ôl i'w soned.
Re: Poem For Times Such As These by Nicholas Jones	16-Sep-04/10:00 AM
Ydy'r gerdd hyn yn gael ei dylanwadu gan "Rhyfel" Hedd Wyn? Gwae fi fy myw mewn oes mor ddreng A Duw ar drai ar orwel pell; O'i ôl mae dyn, yn deyrn a gwreng, Yn codi ei awdurdod hell. Pan deimlodd fyned ymaith Dduw Cyfododd gledd i ladd ei frawd; Mae swn yr ymladd ar ein clyw, A'i gysgod ar fythynnod tlawd. Mae'r hen delynau genid gynt Ynghrog ar gangau'r helyg draw, A gwaed y bechgyn lond y gwynt, A'u gwaed yn gymysg efo'r glaw http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=107941
Re: C. Morgenstern: The Surf by yonderland	16-Sep-04/10:20 AM
It really sounds like Morgenstern! Du hast etwas ganz gut gemacht.
Re: C. Morgenstern: Gentle Songs by yonderland	16-Sep-04/12:49 PM
Hmm I like this one but not as much. I think "glides in silent gear" is not very Morgenstern like and isn't a very good translation for "der still im Äther schwimmt" Also you translate "das eigne Herz" (one's own heart) as "the heart of mine" and use the first person pronoun where it doesen't exist in the original, which completely crushes the charming ambiguity of the second stanza. "In whose eyes sank my sense and mind" is archaic and sounds like german syntax. It is not natural in a translation of an idiomatic spontaneous poet like Morgenstern. Though you have to make changes and substitutions for the sake of cadence in any good translation, you should be aware of what those substitutions are and how they affect the poem.
Re: The Dovina Limericks by Everyone	16-Sep-04/1:33 PM
Hilarity!
Re: I Win. by LintyWeenis	19-Sep-04/10:18 AM
While I am sure you are very qualified to judge your own poetry, being the one who excreted it from your sticky hands, you may like to let others vote on your poems, and refrain from voting on them yourself. Granted, your own self-opinion is a completely accurate indicator of how good your poetry actually is and self-absorbtion is the only way to get an honest objective picture of yourself, and also granted that the number of IPS from which you are able to vote "anonymously" runs in direct proportion to the value of your opinion, I must ask you not to do so, if only so that those who are not as great and important as the poetry God you most indubitably and immutably are can have their humble opinion included in equal weight to your own.
Re: Band Ten Hut by LintyWeenis	19-Sep-04/10:24 AM
Wow. Your own self opinion was almost as accurate as the anatomically fitting username you've picked.
Re: Parting at Morning by Sasha	19-Sep-04/10:32 AM
Thank you, dear eponymous LittleWeenis for the anonymous vote and the user vote that so clearly show my inadequacies that I was unable to see before. I know you are unable to do something of that nature simply out of anger and therefore I humbly bow to you and your bow'ls for all the good low votes you give me. Thank you LittleWeenis, for showing me the error of my ways, you have touched my heart to song.
Re: Screws by helenwales	22-Sep-04/3:34 PM
Helo, here's another welsh poet! Helo, dyma bardd arall cymreig!
Re: why there are no virgins by daggatolar	25-Sep-04/10:49 AM
-7- For shock
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Sep-04/4:40 PM
I know how much you love your poetry. Really. Showing it in shameless self-votes, however, isn't the best way. Now onto the poem. I read this poem (or one very much like it) in some chicken soup book. I also read it in an anthology of "best teen writers" and also in a terrible poetry unit of highschool way way back. So, you get a -10- for being unoriginal on a whole new level.
Re: Dance Of Insanity by forsaken	29-Sep-04/4:49 PM
you mistyped "apart" unless you mean you ripped him to pieces, and then pulled him a part of the body you had just ripped as a going away present.
Re: Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago	31-Oct-04/7:02 AM
I most strongly disagree with all of you. "Call upon the wrath of god on ye" Is an excellent bit of mockery of those who have no idea how to sound archaic but try to anyway. "scurge" is a nicely subtle way of shortening the line to the author's specifications in the manner of the great Robert Duncan. The pun on "may be" in the fourth to last line is an example of supreme wit matched only by the uncapitalized god, a most original way of indicating the author's displeasure with religion. In short, there are few poems better crafted than this. Thus this poem most certainly merits a score of..... HAHAH Gotcha there. Just kidding. "Call upon the wrath of god on ye" just sounds like an illiterate wanker trying to sound biblical "scurge" should be scourge "it maybe" should be "it may be" Now, since you posted a "correction" I would assume that you would at least fix those utterly guffy fuckups if not delete the whole dribbling amorphous, artless and musicless pseudopoem. However, since you did not, I can only assume that your edit was to get your poem up to the top of the list again and erase the 7 and the 8 you'd gotten (which were really generous) Before you wonder about it, yes I really do mean it. Please, try again. On second thought, don't! -10 of shame-
Re: Fascists by Imago	31-Oct-04/7:06 AM
Since Fascists write poetry that rhymes, are you a fascist too, since you do just that. Or are you not, since this dribble isn't really poetry anyway. Wait till you're at least 20 dude.