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Im Scared (Free verse) by crystal4 Im nervous,scared,and sad
Im shaking real bad
When family die its not funny
It makes me feel runny
I would love to run
But its not fun
Im so scared
and nobody cares
Im so alone
Im not home
I need someone
Someone whos the one
Who cares for me
When im scared and week
Im not having fun
Im ready to run
Im so scared
And nobodys there
Where is everyone
Were supose to have fun
everyones gone
and im the only one
Up the ladder:
Apostrophetic Loss
Down the ladder:
Battle Chant
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Posted: September 9, 2004 5:02 PM PDT; Last modified: September 9, 2004 5:02 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.8847394 Overall Rank: 9940 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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crystal4 @ 4.14.129.6
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9-Sep-04/5:03 PM
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this poem is true
RUN & HIDE
Any poem that has the words "and nobody cares" or "I need someone" or "I'm the only one" or really any line in this poem, is a hopeless cliché. I'm sorry a member of your family has died. But this poem is terrible
"When family die its not funny
It makes me feel runny" Classic. You call for seriousness, and then, on the very next line, say that you "feel runny." Dynamite parody. 10.
I like how you took a serious topic and kind of made it into this elementary rhyming thing (and I'm not one to talk). It'll be a 5 for me.
thank you all for yor nice comments.
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