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Im Scared (Free verse) by crystal4

Im nervous,scared,and sad Im shaking real bad When family die its not funny It makes me feel runny I would love to run But its not fun Im so scared and nobody cares Im so alone Im not home I need someone Someone whos the one Who cares for me When im scared and week Im not having fun Im ready to run Im so scared And nobodys there Where is everyone Were supose to have fun everyones gone and im the only one

Sasha 9-Sep-04/6:37 PM
Any poem that has the words "and nobody cares" or "I need someone" or "I'm the only one" or really any line in this poem, is a hopeless cliché. I'm sorry a member of your family has died. But this poem is terrible




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