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Fascists (Other) by Imago Fascists live among the trees
in hollowed logs and under leaves
and in the snow they do not freeze
wrapped warm in death from shoes to sleaves
They are legion for they are many
they are souls that haven't any
They are stranded out at sea
in a storm that they have raised
They are icons of the city
and preachers who are praised
Fascists fuck with midgets
and make over seven digits
Fascists go to PTA
and write poetry that rhymes
They brush their teeth three times a day
and read the New York Times
You'll find fascists everywhere
from the holy land to gay paris`
from pole to pole each and every soul
is a fascist and a fascist all are we
Up the ladder:
the solitary tree
Down the ladder:
deliberate
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Posted: October 30, 2004 11:49 PM PDT; Last modified: October 30, 2004 11:54 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.970199 Overall Rank: 8470 Comments:
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Imago @ 64.8.77.122
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30-Oct-04/11:51 PM
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Yes legion and many mean the same thing. It's a quote.
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Imago @ 64.8.77.122
> Imago
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30-Oct-04/11:55 PM
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based on "We are legion for we are many"
Since Fascists write poetry that rhymes, are you a fascist too, since you do just that. Or are you not, since this dribble isn't really poetry anyway.
Wait till you're at least 20 dude.
I would suggest you read; Baudelaires'- To the reader.
And: Ezra pounds'- Comission. Then try to find the middle ground. ...And Hyde recedes back to Dr. Jekyll
The lines 1-4 set up an expectation of a certain rhythm. And then lines 5-10 use a different rhythm. It all makes the poem difficult to read. I would at least split it into two verses.
'all are we' at the end is an inversion purely to make the poem rhyme. Such behaviour is very wrong. Playing with peoples expectations of where rhymes are to be can work very well. But you must beware that it does not always work. Rather than talking of fascists as you giving the definitive statement it would be better if a character in the poem was saying it. Telling us with your first two lines about fascists (in trees under logs) makes you sound kind of paranoid.
Also you're a fascist since you write poetry that rhymes
Trite. You probably don't even know what a fascist is. I shall be generous for a change: 1/10
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