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Fascists (Other) by Imago

Fascists live among the trees in hollowed logs and under leaves and in the snow they do not freeze wrapped warm in death from shoes to sleaves They are legion for they are many they are souls that haven't any They are stranded out at sea in a storm that they have raised They are icons of the city and preachers who are praised Fascists fuck with midgets and make over seven digits Fascists go to PTA and write poetry that rhymes They brush their teeth three times a day and read the New York Times You'll find fascists everywhere from the holy land to gay paris` from pole to pole each and every soul is a fascist and a fascist all are we

richa 2-Nov-04/5:37 AM
The lines 1-4 set up an expectation of a certain rhythm. And then lines 5-10 use a different rhythm. It all makes the poem difficult to read. I would at least split it into two verses.

'all are we' at the end is an inversion purely to make the poem rhyme. Such behaviour is very wrong.

Playing with peoples expectations of where rhymes are to be can work very well. But you must beware that it does not always work.

Rather than talking of fascists as you giving the definitive statement it would be better if a character in the poem was saying it. Telling us with your first two lines about fascists (in trees under logs) makes you sound kind of paranoid.




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