poemranker ::C. Morgenstern: The Surf by yonderland

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Free verse № 112529

C. Morgenstern: The Surf

Member since 2004 · Posted 15 Sep 2004 · 3 comments

Waiiit and seee... how much have I torn off from you since all the eons of our fight — waiiit and seee... how many proudly standing rocks my arm shall pull into the deep — waiiit and seee... back and forth and back and forth — and ever forward more than back — waiiit and seee... today I'm mild, tomorrow wild — yet never weak, always awake — waiiit and seee... in vain you dam, and ram, and build, your dikes will crumble, I have time — waiiit and seee... and once the people drop their guard, who then will guard you, land forlorn? waiiit and seee... my kingdom's not made of their time: they die, but I will always be — waiiit and seee... and never rest, until you are completely torn onto my ground — waiiit and seee... until your highest snowy firns get eaten by my salt and melt — waiiit and seee... and nothing else there is than I and I and I and I — waiiit and seee

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[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 15-Sep-04/4:11 PM Reply
Exquisite...
[10] Sasha 16-Sep-04/10:20 AM Reply
It really sounds like Morgenstern! Du hast etwas ganz gut gemacht.
[n/a] yonderland › Sasha 16-Sep-04/11:04 AM Reply
Thanks - Took me some time to get the measure & pace right. Morgenstern is tricky, but beautiful. Hope it comes across in English.