Re: Untitled #43 by david	4-Jul-03/1:05 PM
Distinctive.
Re: Untitled #13 by david	4-Jul-03/1:16 PM
Profound.
Re: of the bad hard drive by david	4-Jul-03/1:52 PM
lol.
Re: Night Letter to Yahweh by david	4-Jul-03/1:54 PM
You're good. Have A HUT awarde. 10
Re: granite hearts by david	4-Jul-03/1:55 PM
Yeah, you're a really good poet. Superb collection really.
Re: Ionic Winter by david	4-Jul-03/1:57 PM
Crafty.
Re: lucid building peace by nolan	6-Jul-03/11:00 AM
Smart poem.
Re: vacation by geewhiz1962	7-Jul-03/3:51 PM
I do believe Judy left the room, perhaps she needs you to drive her home?
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Jul-03/6:32 PM
As moving as peristalsis in Louisiana.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Jul-03/6:55 PM
I like Jasmine and Gardenias and lilac, my friends think I'm sensitive and an eligible bachelor. I enjoy long walks off of short cliffs and Sunday drives into the Bermuda triangle. I'm clever, gay, and a wiz at fixing home appliances on amphetimines. I'm Catholic and Satanic, and I have a birthmark shaped like the virgin mary spanking a Palestinian boy with the talmud on a breezy day in Israel. I am horus8 of the clan of the falcon, when I pee upwind, it rains yogurt covered raisen trail mix in third world countries. I am a hero, I am the Prince of Tegucigalpa.
Re: A Little Cold Spot by emeraldskies	8-Jul-03/7:42 PM
That could be chiseled more, but it's much better.
Re: Beneath that Layer by emeraldskies	8-Jul-03/7:43 PM
A man only chases the fruit he cannot have.
Re: Crashing Into Me by emeraldskies	8-Jul-03/7:52 PM
This exposes too much, and you shouldn't because, well, good poetry use that concealment to its advantage, you give too much away here unfortunately. All of these aren't completely hopeless though, they can be reworked. You have to go for the knock out resolve. Read 12673 Jalepeno ave, by Jeremi B. Handrinos, to see what I mean.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Jul-03/8:23 PM
Today, I stepped in poop at my friends house and didn't notice until I was driving home in the car. No fun, let me tell you, doing that is no fun.
Re: a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub	8-Jul-03/10:43 PM
Lol, a good way to show the kids how to compliment and still retain your own and aknowledge theirs without seeming, weak. Good one.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Jul-03/10:59 PM
This is me quoting me, quoting me, and wondering if I'm sane, because I do believe that was me I just saw walk by with a serial number on Poemranker. We have all been tagged, we are ruined, RUINED I TELL YOU! LOOK AROUND YOU! LABELS, PEOPLE YOU TRUST NOW EXPOSED, OH LORDY WHAT HAVE WE DONE, JUST LOOK ! LOOK! YOU FILTHY ANIMALS! LOOK AT MY POOR LITTLE SOUL COLLAPSING ALL SHRIVELED UP AND LABELED. Thank god today, I won the poetic raise to freedom I rhymed Hep C with pepsi, proofing, that I'm clinically defunct as a human and an ass-et of the highest order, an ass-et to my fellow poets as a visionary, a bridge into the future. Yes, I know, it's all very exciting, I was sitting down and all of a sudden... It came to me! Hepititis C and pepsi. WOW! I thought, that hasn't been done, but now, I've done it! DON'T YOU SEE!!!! I'VE RHYMED A SOFTDRINK WITH A HORRIBLE ILLNESS! I'm a poetic hero! I'm a fucking CRUSADER <horus starts singing and doing a crooked version of the smurf fused into the running man, lo da to vee lo dat toe lo da do ve do ta!> I win something, I know it, I don't know what, but I believe I've won something.
Re: Performer by http://mulberryfairy	11-Jul-03/8:15 PM
I liked it.
Re: When Jesus Found Me by http://mulberryfairy	11-Jul-03/8:18 PM
Also, quite amusing.
Re: The Truth at Face Value by http://findingwater	11-Jul-03/8:42 PM
lol.
Re: Is Not Chicago by http://findingwater	11-Jul-03/8:43 PM
Yes!