on do androids dream? by nentwined
28 Apr 2004, 12:03 PM
I'm assuming that you've read "I, Robot." The poem reminded me of it; if you haven't read it, definitely pick it up. Isaac Asimov picks up that question and a whole slew of others. As for the poem itself, I like how in four short lines you address two key issues: AI and slavery. Well done.
on start here by jsd
28 Apr 2004, 12:00 PM
rather depressing at the end there
on The Conqueror Worm by zodiac
28 Apr 2004, 11:47 AM
actually, Mezcal has the worm in it, not Tequila. other than that i enjoyed the poem until the last two lines, which came as a sudden shift. i don't mind a quick twist, but i liked where the poem was going rather than where it ended up.
on something by sk8rs_rule_all
21 Apr 2004, 12:46 PM
please don't use IM language in poetry... "ur" made me cringe
on Crucifixion by Mr Pig
21 Apr 2004, 12:45 PM
what happened to 5-7-5? 4-7-6 is new to me...
on War Begins on Tuesday by Nicholas Jones
21 Apr 2004, 12:42 PM
poems are not a good medium for political views... at least in my humble opinion...
replying on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik
20 Apr 2004, 4:44 PM
sorry, forgot to explain something- i do not actually believe that the poem deserves a zero; i would give it a 7 or 8, not really sure which, but you get the idea.
on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik
20 Apr 2004, 4:40 PM
kind of lame that someone (?) had to go to a bunch of computers at a computer station and "anonymously" vote 10 (check the IP addresses, they're all sharing a port). i feel obligated to give a zero as a balancing force.
on innocent voyeur by nentwined
20 Apr 2004, 1:59 AM
i don't think that "passed" should have its own line... it's not an action word like "interact." otherwise i like it, last line and all
on From Treehouse To Factory by Shardik
19 Apr 2004, 3:23 PM
S4 had the most powerful imagery in the poem, I definitely enjoyed it. Very well done; every word adds something to the poem, there's no fluff anywhere.
replying on The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi
19 Apr 2004, 3:20 PM
no crap, i was being sarcastic... note the dry nature of my comment.
replying on The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi
19 Apr 2004, 3:16 PM
Believe me, I liked The Raven better too; I don't pretend to be able to match or better Poe by any extent. I simply enjoy a little comedy, and if I gave you a chuckle than my goal was completed.
replying on The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi
19 Apr 2004, 9:27 AM
so much insight... i'm so happy that you took the time to read this poem and tell me what you think!
on The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi
18 Apr 2004, 11:05 PM
Sorry if anyone read this before I fixed a couple typos. Also apologizing for the format; it looked much better in MSWord :-) Each stanza should have six lines, with a couple of five line stanzas. The last line is meant to sit alone.
on Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco
18 Apr 2004, 10:56 PM
the problem with writing down lyrics is that, more often than not, it doesn't flow for the reader without a tune behind it. could you write in a tab chart to go along with it? no vote from me; lyrics take on a completely different meaning when put to music.
on Riding High On My Ignore List by horus8
18 Apr 2004, 10:54 PM
it's weaker than your past stuff... i just finished reading about a dozen of your past poems. there's no real point, and the fact that it starts with an AIM reference turned me off. if the whole poem had been about a messenging service it would have a lot of potential.
on Metametahaiku by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
18 Apr 2004, 10:51 PM
cute in a middle school kind of way
on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac
18 Apr 2004, 10:36 PM
Did you know that Foucault's first book was the "History of Sexuality?" Leave it to a French philosopher.