| Re: In Answer To Your Question by Dovina |
27-Jan-05/6:50 PM |
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But you'll never say those things because you're a woman.
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| Re: thoughts on a long lazy day by francis nor capule |
28-Jan-05/6:22 PM |
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the leaving lines are too close together, I think. Maybe you were going for a repetition thing there, but I think it would work better if you changed one of the leavings to something else.
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| Re: Devil, Devil, Hear Me Pray by PsydewaysTears |
28-Jan-05/6:26 PM |
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I've never understood the whole Devil worship thing. If you believe in that whole fairy tale about God and the Devil, why would you choose to worship the one thats going to make you suffer forever...must be a masochist. Anyway, some of the lines aren't bad, the subject notwithstanding.
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28-Jan-05/6:28 PM |
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Nice, as usual, but not your best, I think.
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| Re: Never Said Thank You by unouluvme |
28-Jan-05/6:31 PM |
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Reminds me of that Jimmy Eats World song....Not bad, but you could stand to put a little more thought into it. Seems more like just emotion.
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| Re: just can't by shygirl1619 |
28-Jan-05/6:34 PM |
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Spelling and grammar. Need to fix deez things, yo.
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| Re: Ode to a Friend by tadpole |
28-Jan-05/6:39 PM |
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This should be under acrostic. No offense, but I'm not lovin' this one...
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| Re: Hades Ain't Far Enough by MacFrantic |
28-Jan-05/6:41 PM |
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| Re: This > That...Why? by MacFrantic |
28-Jan-05/6:42 PM |
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Not lovin' this one as much. Not too bad, but doesn't really stand out.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Jan-05/6:44 PM |
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Makes me a little horny, but that's about it. I'd like to see some other topic by you...most anything would do.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Jan-05/6:48 PM |
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ummmm, ok. Well, you've got this..."Death isn't frightening but dying is." Thats not too bad...I think maybe you should try to work on your stuff a little...maybe not just try to get something posted immediately when you CAN. I'm guilty of the same thing but I've tried to curb that and actually think things out before I post them...anyway, just some unsolicited advice.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Jan-05/6:50 PM |
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Regarding this poem: Please see my comment on your previous post and the comment on CLS's previous post.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Jan-05/6:53 PM |
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Please see my comment on your previous post and on Lydia Evelyn's post. This is better than the last, though.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
31-Jan-05/3:23 PM |
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Like it DGB. You're pretty good at the storytelling poem thing..I'll give you that.
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| Re: Satan's Pillar: The Wisdom of Heresy. by SupremeDreamer |
31-Jan-05/3:26 PM |
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That Satan...always tricking people.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
31-Jan-05/3:29 PM |
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I saw the movie..Michael K. Fox...not his best, but it'll do. I don't remember all this from the movieee but ok....
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| Re: thoughts on a long lazy day by francis nor capule |
31-Jan-05/3:30 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
31-Jan-05/3:32 PM |
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Ok, but it seems to me that if your life sucks in the Winter, it's probably still going to suck in the spring..
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| Re: Psalm of Wonder by Dovina |
31-Jan-05/3:36 PM |
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Not a bad sentiment here. That God is a funny character. Always doing things to upset the legions of peons that he created. Kind of like an ant farm, we are. Little kid has an ant farm..gets bored, shakes it up and ruins all their tunnels...mmhmm
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| Re: Depth of Illusion by Beyond_Dreams |
31-Jan-05/3:39 PM |
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waaaaaaaaaayy too much rhyme for my taste, and forced in places at that. Kind of pretty though in places.
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