on In Answer To Your Question by Dovina
27 Jan 2005, 6:50 PM
But you'll never say those things because you're a woman.
on thoughts on a long lazy day by francis nor capule
28 Jan 2005, 6:22 PM
the leaving lines are too close together, I think. Maybe you were going for a repetition thing there, but I think it would work better if you changed one of the leavings to something else.
on Devil, Devil, Hear Me Pray by PsydewaysTears
28 Jan 2005, 6:26 PM
I've never understood the whole Devil worship thing. If you believe in that whole fairy tale about God and the Devil, why would you choose to worship the one thats going to make you suffer forever...must be a masochist. Anyway, some of the lines aren't bad, the subject notwithstanding.
on some deleted poem
28 Jan 2005, 6:28 PM
Nice, as usual, but not your best, I think.
on Never Said Thank You by unouluvme
28 Jan 2005, 6:31 PM
Reminds me of that Jimmy Eats World song....Not bad, but you could stand to put a little more thought into it. Seems more like just emotion.
on just can't by shygirl1619
28 Jan 2005, 6:34 PM
Spelling and grammar. Need to fix deez things, yo.
on Ode to a Friend by tadpole
28 Jan 2005, 6:39 PM
This should be under acrostic. No offense, but I'm not lovin' this one...
on Hades Ain't Far Enough by MacFrantic
28 Jan 2005, 6:41 PM
This one I likes.
on This > That...Why? by MacFrantic
28 Jan 2005, 6:42 PM
Not lovin' this one as much. Not too bad, but doesn't really stand out.
on some deleted poem
28 Jan 2005, 6:44 PM
Makes me a little horny, but that's about it. I'd like to see some other topic by you...most anything would do.
on some deleted poem
28 Jan 2005, 6:48 PM
ummmm, ok. Well, you've got this..."Death isn't frightening but dying is." Thats not too bad...I think maybe you should try to work on your stuff a little...maybe not just try to get something posted immediately when you CAN. I'm guilty of the same thing but I've tried to curb that and actually think things out before I post them...anyway, just some unsolicited advice.
on some deleted poem
28 Jan 2005, 6:50 PM
Regarding this poem: Please see my comment on your previous post and the comment on CLS's previous post.
on some deleted poem
28 Jan 2005, 6:53 PM
Please see my comment on your previous post and on Lydia Evelyn's post. This is better than the last, though.
on some deleted poem
31 Jan 2005, 3:23 PM
Like it DGB. You're pretty good at the storytelling poem thing..I'll give you that.
on Satan's Pillar: The Wisdom of Heresy. by SupremeDreamer
31 Jan 2005, 3:26 PM
That Satan...always tricking people.
on some deleted poem
31 Jan 2005, 3:29 PM
I saw the movie..Michael K. Fox...not his best, but it'll do. I don't remember all this from the movieee but ok....
on thoughts on a long lazy day by francis nor capule
31 Jan 2005, 3:30 PM
better.
on some deleted poem
31 Jan 2005, 3:32 PM
Ok, but it seems to me that if your life sucks in the Winter, it's probably still going to suck in the spring..
on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina
31 Jan 2005, 3:36 PM
Not a bad sentiment here. That God is a funny character. Always doing things to upset the legions of peons that he created. Kind of like an ant farm, we are. Little kid has an ant farm..gets bored, shakes it up and ruins all their tunnels...mmhmm
on Depth of Illusion by Beyond_Dreams
31 Jan 2005, 3:39 PM
waaaaaaaaaayy too much rhyme for my taste, and forced in places at that. Kind of pretty though in places.