poemranker ::Never Said Thank You by unouluvme

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Free verse № 119089

Never Said Thank You

by unouluvme

Member since 2004 · Posted 27 Jan 2005 · Edited 29 Jan 2005 · 4 comments

you lifted me to stand on the skies you stole air to fill my lungs you opened my newborn eyes now here you are, under my feet in the shallow grave i dug you. I've fallen out of the skies, i'm gasping for air, im blindfolded. all alone. come back to me. im all by myself in this world i never said thank you and now i cant sleep i hear your voice in my ears i feel your arms around me i shiver at your breath on my neck (pause) but your gone.

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[6] wilco 28-Jan-05/6:31 PM Reply
Reminds me of that Jimmy Eats World song....Not bad, but you could stand to put a little more thought into it. Seems more like just emotion.
[10] deleted user 28-Jan-05/7:06 PM Reply
Good poem.
[10] deleted user 28-Jan-05/7:07 PM Reply
Sorry- hit a 6 by accident--I give you a ten!
[3] Beyond_Dreams 31-Jan-05/5:03 PM Reply
Yes I agree you have lack of thought in this poem. If you're going to write a poem that everybody writes about you have knock it out of ball feild to make it stand alone and seprate it from the rest. You failed to do that in this poem.