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Never Said Thank You (Free verse) by unouluvme

you lifted me to stand on the skies you stole air to fill my lungs you opened my newborn eyes now here you are, under my feet in the shallow grave i dug you. I've fallen out of the skies, i'm gasping for air, im blindfolded. all alone. come back to me. im all by myself in this world i never said thank you and now i cant sleep i hear your voice in my ears i feel your arms around me i shiver at your breath on my neck (pause) but your gone.

wilco 28-Jan-05/6:31 PM
Reminds me of that Jimmy Eats World song....Not bad, but you could stand to put a little more thought into it. Seems more like just emotion.




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