| Re: To Lesley by Bahookie |
11-Mar-03/8:35 AM |
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Too many selfs and not enough of anything else.
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| Re: Karma by blankel |
11-Mar-03/8:40 AM |
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Interesting spin on the pimple poem.
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| Re: Looks like war, but tastes like chicken by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
16-Mar-03/7:22 PM |
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Pretty funny stuff. Inspired by the girlfriend's job no doubt.
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| Re: Blue Fuckin' Moon by lastobelus |
16-Mar-03/7:33 PM |
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Some pretty good writing in here surrounded by obvious influences that take the voice from your own. Find out who you are in this piece and make it work. A thoughtful rewrite would clean things up.
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| Re: The Song I Miss by Miggy |
16-Mar-03/7:48 PM |
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the song remains the same, migster.
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| Re: Triptych: Rural by lastobelus |
16-Mar-03/7:51 PM |
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You swear fucking more than Mamet. the last one takes the cake. Can't say I am all that fond of the others. But what the fuck, eh.
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22-Mar-03/8:05 PM |
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My name is Settle. I live in Rhode Island. I draw pictures and write poems to make you all vomit with laughter. I am cool. Yea!
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22-Mar-03/8:07 PM |
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My name is Settle. I live in Rhode Island. I draw pictures and write poems to make you all vomit with laughter. I am cool. Yea!
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22-Mar-03/9:44 PM |
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Again, there is a fine line between sappy melodrama and quality insight. You fell off that line here and I can only hope it is merely a lack of experience in the subject. If not, then I suspect it is just bad writing.
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| Re: The Bloody War Of Angels by Caducus |
23-Mar-03/7:00 PM |
hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha.
no, wait.
hahahahahahaaaaaahahahahahahahahahahah.
This poem is beyond bad.
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| Re: Easy Way Out by Blindproject217 |
23-Mar-03/7:01 PM |
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| Re: Shut Up by openwounds |
23-Mar-03/7:07 PM |
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Can you really hear silence? I believe there is a point in complete quiet where the ears can actually feel pain because they are trying so hard to hear something. Anyway, besides that I find the poem quite bad. Sorry. Have a nice day.
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| Re: Leave by Luv2write |
23-Mar-03/9:20 PM |
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Wow, who turned out the punctuation?
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| Re: Life by Luv2write |
23-Mar-03/9:26 PM |
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What the hell is this? Woe is I?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
24-Mar-03/9:34 AM |
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"3am is the loneliest hour to shower." Just because it is late does that excuse you from the use of punctuation?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
24-Mar-03/10:49 AM |
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My name is Settle. I live in Rhode Island. I draw pictures and write poems to make you all vomit with laughter. I am cool. Yea!
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| Re: Mirror to Mirror by Roisin |
26-Mar-03/11:31 AM |
And as a bulb buried
deep in wintry soil
knows not to die,
I really like these lines, which makes the last line pale a bit next to them. Can you find a way to stick with the image? Maybe. Maybe not?
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26-Mar-03/11:35 AM |
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Much of the wording is good here. I am a bit confused of the context of who "our" and "we" are. It seems awful ambiguous. But other than that a nice job overall.
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26-Mar-03/11:41 AM |
Again, some excellent writing here (Already crowded chest, You are phonecall father)that just needs tightening and a bit of clarity. you do a nice job of keeping emotions in check yet making a point. Unlike cadacus who vomits sap all over the page.
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| Re: I Miss You by Birdman42s |
26-Mar-03/3:28 PM |
No wonder Caducus writes weak poems. Look at the stuff he likes.
Hey, birdman: I miss you, too.
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