Re: Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage	27-Jan-04/4:57 PM
I could tell you were a woman. Dickens could tell George Eliot was immediately, too, or so the anecdote goes. Are the leaves from O.Henry?
Re: My Life As a Single Teenage Girl by Princess_Snowflake	27-Jan-04/4:59 PM
minus 8 for not being a haiku. Minus another 1 for not being very poetic or making any sense.
Re: Murderers in the Tropics by Fear of Garbage	27-Jan-04/5:01 PM
Mon dieu! >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> "sleepy, safe and warm" could be different.
Re: Bloom Inside by hatedestruction	27-Jan-04/5:28 PM
Good bleach-era Nirvana lyrics. I always thought that album was underrecognized.
Re: Are You O.K.? by sonawrote	27-Jan-04/5:34 PM
This is a mess. Is your .-button stuck? Are you ok? Do you know what consumption is?
Re: Ghost by lastobelus	28-Jan-04/7:59 AM
Pimple. I'm surprised at you. Don't worry, my last was an utter flop.
Re: Tomorrow by sykes	28-Jan-04/9:35 AM
W-(you are here)-W
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jan-04/9:45 AM
If there's one thing rosicrucians do well it's write good hells. You and Michael Wigglesworth. "smoke up the moon" - Hell yeah! Smoke it up!
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jan-04/10:05 AM
You understand? You're not going to get a fair representation of what we think of your thought, imagery, etc., because it looks like misspelled kid writing in squiggle pen. Half of poetry is just projecting the illusion of being a real writer.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jan-04/10:06 AM
Before you post a bunch of stuff that's just like the poems you deleted, consider using capital I's and punctuation, which are still standard parts of English grammar and have the bonus of making your poems look more like poems and less like hack notebook scribblings.
Re: Ode to Poem Ranker by Lenore	28-Jan-04/2:23 PM
Hear hear!
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jan-04/2:25 PM
It's hard to say with a shorter poem. Do you think it's better?
Re: Cold Rain Road by middenHeap	28-Jan-04/2:29 PM
No comma after skid. The 'man' reference is weird. It either sticks out too much or not enough. You are no old gentleman; you are as vernal as the Spring. On another string I hypothesize you as a young lady.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jan-04/2:37 PM
You're going to hate this: slice, moldy, stinks, thrashing, & chucking should be lower case. Old, throwing, I, and Cheesy can be lower case. You see?
Re: After The Years Howl By by Lenore	28-Jan-04/2:39 PM
The main problem is the title. Good Ode-y meter and part-rhyme.
Re: Come off with me Carly back into the city by zodiac	28-Jan-04/2:46 PM
ajt - this one's not supposed to be a puzzle. None of them are, really.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jan-04/3:12 PM
You're getting it. One part of this is making me think really hard. For that, a 9.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Jan-04/4:53 PM
"A Murder of Crows" is already a Cuba Gooding Jr. movie, but then you knew that. This would be a lot stronger (that's all I'm saying) if you thought of something else for that line.
Re: raven hath spoken (testing....) by crwncka1	29-Jan-04/4:28 AM
Dear god... You might consider changing your title to "8 Commas, a Dash, an Exclamation Mark, and 839 Words of Meaningless Rambling Drivel, Topped By a Pretentious Use of 'Hath'." Do you do this all the time?!? My favorite part is "a true vision of knowing found looking deep within to find the surface hiding your real nature" which is, after all, as good an instance as any of something being found by finding.
Re: The Hermit by sykes	29-Jan-04/5:52 AM
Ah, the famous 'street'/'speak' half-rhyme, finished up with the stalwart 'home' and 'alone'! Go on, now, and tell yourself (and us) that we can't write half this well. We don't mind.