Re: Inevitable by _iamtwilight_	23-Feb-04/9:03 AM
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Re: Whore Of Nazareth by Mona Lisa	24-Feb-04/1:46 PM
"And my wombs not yellowed by life," - as good a place as any for: Bow'ls.
Re: Whore Of Nazareth by Mona Lisa	24-Feb-04/6:17 PM
rockmage's last login: Tuesday, 17-Feb-04/7:08 PM.
Re: Good King Brownceslas by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	25-Feb-04/10:53 AM
The best rhyming on this site ever! Horizon/wisened, hardened/pardened (sic), tincture/sphincter, sure/ordure - gems all. And a worthy lesson to CLS and her ilk, if they weren't too stupid to recognise it.
Re: Wartner by unouluvme	25-Feb-04/11:32 AM
Shatner.
Re: Wartner by unouluvme	25-Feb-04/6:10 PM
Crystal Lane Swift/lydia evelyn has posted 152 poems on this site. Only horus8 and INTRANSIT have posted more. Does anyone else find this REALLY UNSETTLING??!!?!?! I mean, WHAT THE HELL FOLKS???!??!?!?
Re: Choices in the Road by Pervy Elf	26-Feb-04/5:38 AM
I'd like to recommend the following revision: Choices in the Road (Free verse) by Pervy Elf Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, And sorry I could not travel both And be one traveler long I stood Scratching my cock (which has a hood) In its tangle of pubic undergrowth.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Feb-04/12:55 PM
Periods are not standard endings for stanzas. Note "seduced. By harlot wearing garments red..." Are you sure you didn't mean a comma or something? And also, incidentally, some kind of article before "harlot"?
Re: Opposites by BrandonW	26-Feb-04/1:01 PM
You had me until "this thing I call my life". Ugh. And congratulations on your use of the word copacetic. It's the fashizzle.
Re: beef flavored ramen by ThePariahDog	26-Feb-04/1:03 PM
A truer sex poem was never written. "endless noodle sucked through an indifferent orifice" -10-
Re: Homecoming by somemorepoetry	26-Feb-04/1:47 PM
Good except for "move on to".
Re: Dream of a Vanilla Sky by smlink84	27-Feb-04/4:12 AM
Vanilla Sky is the absolute worst movie ever. I have seen films that were trying to be bad which aren't as bad. Referencing that movie in a pretentious wannabe serious poem is, I'm afraid, equivalent to enfolding a moldy piece of stale jerky in a fresh steaming turd.
Re: Little Tounge by Figure 8	27-Feb-04/5:15 PM
Tongue.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Feb-04/9:28 AM
No semicolon after blade. Don't capitalize Your ever. 'Pierces through' is redundant, since piercing means it's breaking through. I personally dislike poems where the narrator is really aware of his/her unstable psychological situation, but this is less heavy-handed than most. Changing 'from thinking what I think' would make it even better.
Re: Lifes work by richa	28-Feb-04/9:37 AM
'to be' in 'once more to be buried' bothers me. I've been looking in Poet's Market at poetry reviews which specialize in minimalism, which I think is where you're headed. You might take a look at 'Indefinite Space' (wings.buffalo.edu/epc/ezines/treehome/tree05/indef_22.html) and 'Raw Dog Press/Post Poems,' (www.freeyellow.com/members/rawdog) among others. See if you can get published.
Re: Two words by bondjedi	29-Feb-04/11:30 AM
Haiku - so easy / I can even do them stoned / And screwing your mom.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Mar-04/6:23 AM
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Re: Nature Of The Day by impert&ent	1-Mar-04/6:45 AM
The last line should be dropped. -10-
Re: Inside Out by etherealmaiden	1-Mar-04/7:08 AM
This is a textbook of overused rhymes - places/faces, night/fight, hours/flowers, eyes/lies, walking/talking, crying/lying, pain/insane, and so on. That's not your fault though, and it'll take care of itself as you read more poetry. Sewing your friends back onto you was a really great imgae and caught me off-guard. I don't know if that's a common phrase, but I've never heard it before. If it's an original, then bravo.
Re: The Left Book Club by Nicholas Jones	1-Mar-04/9:20 AM
Fabulous.