Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy	6-Nov-05/4:31 AM
You must mean Billie Holiday singing "gimme a pigsfoot and a bottle of beer" as written by a Jew. Try Nina Simone: You know I smoked a lot of grass, Oh Lord, I popped a lot of pills But I never did touch nothing that my spirit couldn't kill You know I see a lot of people walkin' round here with tombstones in their eyes 'Cause the pusher don't care, child, if you live or if you die God damn on the pusher, I said God damn him God damn him, pusher man You have to hear it. When Nina says God damn, you know God's paying attention.
Re: tourist by skaskowski	6-Nov-05/4:36 AM
Regarding the poem: I don't think she redecorates by keeping (or reinstalling) the original fixtures, which I assume is what tourists do in old country places. It needs a different word. Regarding tourists: Mid-desert, they will unfailingly find the biggest patch of sunlight and stand in it, blinking.
Re: Scarlet by BrandonW	6-Nov-05/4:38 AM
Really? Really???
Re: The Old Boat by Damon Mower	6-Nov-05/4:40 AM
Good except the last line.
Re: The Bed I Made by BrandonW	6-Nov-05/4:55 AM
A: Divide the total number of times she's walked through the door by the total number of times she could potentially have walked through the door. The second number should be very high. A: Just make them up. We won't know the difference. A: Use mnemonics, like I knew at precisely two -or- She left at four because she's a whore. Of course, that doesn't help if you've already forgotten what time precisely you knew. You might try hypnosis, or keeping a daily planner. A: In the dark, preferably crouching.
Re: The Fonz Koan by zen_tom	7-Nov-05/4:52 AM
Not haiku.
Re: When Did You Walk Away? by TLRufener	7-Nov-05/5:20 AM
I know you use your poetry to convey your thoughts and experiences and wish to make an accurate account of your life and times and everything, but did you know that in 61 poems you've asked an astonishing 83 questions? Do you plan on ever answering anything?
Re: Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina	8-Nov-05/6:11 AM
Not your best. I suggest you seem to know a lot about how poets think and act while simultaneously holding the belief that poetry is not something requiring training, effort, or skill while simultaneously writing crap poetry about it.
Re: I LOVE A PROSTITUTE by Bhaskaryya	8-Nov-05/6:22 AM
1) You can't love someone by wanting to return her innocence and respect. That means you love someone with innocence and respect who she is not - yet. 2) You can be pretty sure she doesn't love you. Or even feel you, technically.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Nov-05/7:24 AM
I'd like to think the title was intentional, like Joey on Friends going, How youu douuin'?
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Nov-05/7:26 AM
Getting better. But seriously, do you have NO 21st century images to draw on?
Re: Forgive Me by TLRufener	9-Nov-05/7:28 AM
You are here because someone told you you need to ask forgiveness for practically everything you do. Now that you have an answer, I hope you'll consider getting off your knees and going outside.
Re: Headlines by Dovina	11-Nov-05/4:07 AM
Are you suggesting it's as unreasoning to blame God and Bush for virus and unpreparedness as it is to blame Donald Duck? Or merely that people are prone to blame everything, the right along with the wrong? Either way, it's dangerous talk on your part.
Re: drunken jill by calliope	12-Nov-05/1:35 AM
Not as good as the last one.
Re: my you have a bubbly laugh by skaskowski	12-Nov-05/1:37 AM
I like warbly. The rest can go.
Re: The Hawk by Dovina	12-Nov-05/1:39 AM
The present-past-present changes are a little off-putting.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Nov-05/1:40 AM
Congratulations on ABAB rhyming. You're one of, like, 5 poemranker users who can do that now.
Re: Us Sinners by BrandonW	13-Nov-05/12:55 AM
Question: Could a God who by most accounts is all things, including all-forgiving, really allow a soul to go to Hell for eternity?
Re: not to settle for less than almost obliteration by ay deee	13-Nov-05/12:55 AM
"consumptive" is a great word, but probably not what you meant.
Re: Farm animals by INTRANSIT	13-Nov-05/12:56 AM
I liked the butcher block better, and thought it was sensible enough. This is okay, though, if it satisfies everyone else.