tourist

Member since 2001 · Posted 5 Nov 2005 · 2 comments

a mansion hid past a brown blueberry bush on the crest of a crusty old hill. and bid for the last creepy spot in the trafficking roads that wound round her whole dell. and paid bucks and pennies for each, and, well, any surveyor of the indescribable. so she might redecorate all of the ornate and useless glass fixtures she kept alight.

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[10] zodiac 6-Nov-05/4:36 AM Reply

Regarding the poem: I don't think she redecorates by keeping (or reinstalling) the original fixtures, which I assume is what tourists do in old country places. It needs a different word.

Regarding tourists: Mid-desert, they will unfailingly find the biggest patch of sunlight and stand in it, blinking.

[n/a] ALChemy 6-Nov-05/1:17 PM Reply

Lose "whole" in stanza 2.