| Re: "REAL" People by Scouser |
13-Oct-02/12:25 AM |
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You sorry little shit. You dare to write about democracy and then cram the ballot box with fake votes? You are a scumball. Best list my ass. You fall from the sky carrying a shit-pie and walk away with the blue-ribbon? I think not. I spit on you and your crappy poem. Your poem is not worthy enough to lick the shoes of my worst.
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| Re: Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT |
12-Oct-02/5:14 PM |
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The last image is the prize winner here. You probably know that already. I don't care for the hook line and sinker, except that it ties in with the last stanza. Could the cronies be fishing instead of butchering?
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| Re: Kindling by <~> |
11-Oct-02/3:54 PM |
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he's his mama's sunshine. sweetest cherry in the apple pie. Make him show you how he does it.
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| Re: Breeze by Nicholas Jones |
11-Oct-02/8:18 AM |
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The middle line speaks to me on several levels, suprisingly. I'm in a sensitive mood.
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| Re: e-mail from a friend by josh_5o |
10-Oct-02/11:36 PM |
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| Re: a comment on the truth about poets by New Life Drug |
10-Oct-02/11:22 PM |
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I don't believe you. Prove it.
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| Re: a comment on Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass |
10-Oct-02/8:35 PM |
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I'll ask the Lord to send you more shit and AIDS. Now go make your mother proud. By the way, what's bukkake?
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| Re: the truth about poets by New Life Drug |
10-Oct-02/7:10 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass |
10-Oct-02/7:00 PM |
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I'm so sorry Frass, it's surreal isn't it. Everythngs going to be o.k. I mean geez Death waits around every corner, but things have got to be insane over there right now. I was praying for you today. didn't know it was you personally, but I was praying for you. The thing is, your going to walk out of this with a keener appreciation. 7 out of 9. 7 out of 9.
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| Re: more{Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8 |
10-Oct-02/2:45 PM |
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Revolting, but in a good way. Why does porn make me queasy? Should there be parenthesis' around L2 in the 1st Haiku?
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| Re: Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass |
10-Oct-02/2:38 PM |
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Well, someones been doing their exercises. I love the way this piece looks, and also "pumping gas in Manassas" the last lines at the end of S1 & S2 should be eliminated. Lines 3,4, & 5 in S2 need tiobe re-worked slightly. S3 needs to be re-worked. Sounds like a hurried after-thought.
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| Re: a comment on The Thought Of It by Christof |
10-Oct-02/8:05 AM |
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Who knows! We might all just be mice in a lab. Making the best of it is always a creative act. We are happy in our delision and that's all that matters. Actually as I have stated 1,000x's this site has done wonders for me. Glad to help.
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| Re: Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus |
10-Oct-02/8:00 AM |
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I braced myself for the punch, you were certain to deliver.
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| Re: The Thought Of It by Christof |
10-Oct-02/7:50 AM |
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Oh my, what a difference that makes. Who'd a thunk it.
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| Re: Temptation Stings, Midday Nashville by <~> |
10-Oct-02/7:46 AM |
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I can always count on you to make things interesting. You communicate emotion through concrete images, my favorite.
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| Re: Daywalker by Blade |
10-Oct-02/7:39 AM |
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| Re: a comment on The Thought Of It by Christof |
10-Oct-02/7:34 AM |
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the question mark is a good idea.
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| Re: The Thought Of It by Christof |
10-Oct-02/7:32 AM |
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"We were thinking of" you end the line on a preposition, and I my mind expects a new thought afterward.
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| Re: The Thought Of It by Christof |
10-Oct-02/7:23 AM |
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lines 4,5, & 6 are confusing. The last image I believe would work better if you replaced 'Like' with 'All' the poor dear really is a prisoner.
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| Re: a comment on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator |
9-Oct-02/9:52 PM |
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Your words are just so condescending. I realize now you don't mean them to be, but they truly are.
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