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Trembling Worry (Free verse) by Ninoy_Instigator It is such hell out there.
Who are all these guys?
They're attacking my loved one
With threats of flirting and lies.
There goes another one.
Apparently he knows her from school.
But thank God, my baby doesn't budge.
She doesn't fall for scum labelled 'cool'.
My country is filled with these punks
They all flirt with funny talk.
But I want my girl to love me for real.
I won't act like something I'm not.
My friends know who I am,
I don't need to impress them.
I don't want the popular blonde bimbo,
They are the sluts that I condemn.
My beloved is quiet, pure, and honest.
A Filipina girl with an innocent face.
But God I can't take it much longer,
there are dangerous threats all over the place.
I see guys who are spoiled brats
They never lifted a finger to do work.
They were raised on dirty thoughts and sex.
Now they're attacking her, please God it better not work.
I have to refortify my defenses
She is definitely not safe.
I have to build up my love
So other guys have no chance to chase.
My dear beloved, You don't know it right now
but I want to protect you throughout my life.
And when you read this, take it as a proposal
because I want you to be my wife.
Up the ladder:
Wood Grain Secert
Down the ladder:
feather duster
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Posted: October 6, 2002 8:47 PM PDT; Last modified: October 14, 2002 9:57 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9403987 Overall Rank: 9032 Comments:
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Katie @ 63.212.190.3
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7-Oct-02/6:45 PM
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Okay...I'm a blonde!! I'm not a bembo :( snif snif, not all us blondes are little whores you know? I'm not vein, but I am attractive, and I'm still a virgine...Imagine that...and I'm not a slut :) so not all blondes are bad, hehe. Okay enough of that, I get what you are reffering too. But besides that I love you poem!! I can't wait to read more of your work!! 9/10 =)
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Ninoy_Instigator @ 216.148.244.38
> Katie
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7-Oct-02/8:19 PM
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Thank you for your comments, and public, I have a retraction to make. I did not mean that blondes are sluts. What I meant was that I don't want to submit and pant over the same stereotypical girls that my friends pant over immediately. I'm so sorry for anyone who took offense.
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<~> @ 67.84.171.10
> Ninoy_Instigator
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7-Oct-02/8:24 PM
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it's not that i took offense at you poem. i take offense at katie's senseless kowtowing to it. i am blonde. and it would take a hell of a lot to offend me.
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Ninoy_Instigator @ 170.224.224.38
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7-Oct-02/8:27 PM
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what did katie do wrong and what does kowtowing mean?
Hi! I'm Katie! I'm not vain or anything, but I do feel it's important to point out that I am blonde every five minutes or so. I am blonde.
You know dark angel get a life, dang it. I was messing around for anyone who is to slow to figure that out...not saying any names (DA)
sweet irony! katie, calling -=Dark_Angel=- 'slow'! now that is rich indeed.
I know you were messing around, you silly bint. And I was mocking the way that you were messing around. Try jest-level-switching your way out of that one.
Wite a poem about teaching Joanna how to take care of herself. That might be interesting and not so stereotypically condescending.
this coming from someone who immideately takes the stereotype that all muslims are evil, and loves a poem that condemns Islam. You my friend are a great hypocrite and stereotype. But anyways I still must thank you, for you have given input.
Just tie her up already. Smother her in the burka, sherpa, furpa. Frumpy and in the kitchen. I like 'em that way too. And I gave input to the poem. I said it was as bad as Cheese Whiz and you deleted my comment. And then I said censorship was against you martyrs principles, or was it? Huh! Do you burn poems? Do you want to gas the Americans?
I immediately take no stereotypes. You are jumpimg to conclusions. The poem you're referring to does not state that all muslims are evil. first of all I don't even believe in evil. Second of all I am the least prejudice person you will ever have the luck to run in to. I love the poem because of it's structure and it's satire on this whole terrorist nonsense. You take yourself too seriously. Stop making a jackass of yourself. The world is full of viewpoints. Learn how to handle yourself like an adult. What kind of stereotype am I? you know nothing about me, my life-style, or my beliefs. I am everything you third-worlders wish all Americans would be. you owe me an apology.
And she looks sexy in a burka! Can you handle that.
Baby, you look sexy to me too. Talk with you soon.
Okay, this poem has turned into a war zone, I was just trying to express how I feel, but you all are entitled to a point. I'm still going to post more poetry, so I quote Nas in saying "You can hate me now, but I won't stop now." Sorry for expressing my feelings to a girl.
That is the spirit a young pugilist should have. If it is not against your religion, you should look into the like of Thom Jones and, of course, Hemingway. Both had aspirations with the fists and both spin a pretty good yarn.
If you are referring to me as 'girl' you couldn't be more wrong. I am a woman to the full extent of what the word implies, and dare I say more man then you at this moment in time. I couldn't possibly hate a juvenile machista like you. Your revelatory remark about not expressing yourself to girls, marks you as the ego-maniacal, oppressive, controlling husband/father your culture breeds. I am latina and well versed in the pitfalls of parternalistic societies. Joanna would do better to fuck everyone of those assholes, just to learn what really gives her pleasure, Which I'm sure you are throughly incapable of doing. Ever licked a clit? She should go to university and make her own life. Thus avoiding enslavement and boredom by marriage to your kind.
I asumed you were Filipino. Clits and fucking are best when mature.
Okay, and since when are Filipinos known for breeding abusive/controlling husbands? You're generalizing a whole culture.
think about it for a minute. What are the gender roles in your culture? My culture is Hispanic which is very similar to yours. Of course I'm generalizing but let's just say that more often then not women are constrained by our cultures to certain gender specific roles. the standards and expectations set up for men and women are very different. Everything from virginity to hierarchy. Your poem mirrors that. I sure your intentions are good, but you have to open yourself up to being the kind of partner who will help a person find themselves not play house
Okay, I appreciate that comment, it was true. But you must understand that all cultures have gender roles, it's obvious anthropology. I just want to get it straight that, in this poem I was just trying to get to the point that I am worried about Joanna because of all external forces. I do trust her, but everyone has that worry inside you know? It's sort of like saying I love this person and I know she is the perfect partner, but what were to happen if she was snatched away? what would I do? I dont want to control her lifestyle or nothing, I just want her to know that she is my exclusive interest, and I hope she reciprocates.
Oh, and hispanics are alot more controlling than Filipinos in history. They came over and invaded our country and colonized us, and forced us into catholicism. Just a tidbit, not too relevant
Absolutely relevant. They colonized your indegenous peoples, stripped them of their culture and forced them to adopt their twisted patriarchal oppressive system. Just like they did here in the Americas. That's my point. Like it or not your belief system and gender philosophies are heavily tainted with their bullshit. Women don't need your protection. They need your unconditional love and friendship.
Okay I dont know where in the poem I ever mirrored an image of different gender roles for men and women. I did say I want to protect her though, and that is in the sense of safety-real physical safety. It is not about virginity, it is about providing for her, stuff like that, I don't mind if she gets a job or does anything like that, I dont care what she wears, or anything like that. I dont want to control her life, I just want to be there to protect her when she does need me.
the women in your poem are delegated the classic roles of either virgin(innocence) or whore. The men are either villians or heroes. She fullfills your fantasy of the perfect wife, why?
Again as I have explained in the other poem, innocence does not mean the exact same thing as virginity. I dont know about her sex life. She is the fantasy of my perfect wife because hell, I can just tell when I look in her face. We are completely in sync with eachother. It has nothing to do with sex. I could care less if she's a virgin or not. She is my thought of a perfect wife because, she has been the only girl in my life that I could ever picture myself actually going through a marriage with, and the only girl I have ever pictured growing old with
um...dang it...nope I can't say I can whisel my way out of that one DA, but still mocking me with out a jk, or indicating that you where 'messin' around. LoL!! =) and I know your not slow...and I don't mean to give off this Bitch aperience...and good poem Anthony
just don't beat her when you think she flirts with someone 5 years down the road, mm-k?
Gago. Bachla.
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