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Trembling Worry (Free verse) by Ninoy_Instigator

It is such hell out there. Who are all these guys? They're attacking my loved one With threats of flirting and lies. There goes another one. Apparently he knows her from school. But thank God, my baby doesn't budge. She doesn't fall for scum labelled 'cool'. My country is filled with these punks They all flirt with funny talk. But I want my girl to love me for real. I won't act like something I'm not. My friends know who I am, I don't need to impress them. I don't want the popular blonde bimbo, They are the sluts that I condemn. My beloved is quiet, pure, and honest. A Filipina girl with an innocent face. But God I can't take it much longer, there are dangerous threats all over the place. I see guys who are spoiled brats They never lifted a finger to do work. They were raised on dirty thoughts and sex. Now they're attacking her, please God it better not work. I have to refortify my defenses She is definitely not safe. I have to build up my love So other guys have no chance to chase. My dear beloved, You don't know it right now but I want to protect you throughout my life. And when you read this, take it as a proposal because I want you to be my wife.

god'swife 9-Oct-02/8:40 PM
think about it for a minute. What are the gender roles in your culture? My culture is Hispanic which is very similar to yours. Of course I'm generalizing but let's just say that more often then not women are constrained by our cultures to certain gender specific roles. the standards and expectations set up for men and women are very different. Everything from virginity to hierarchy. Your poem mirrors that. I sure your intentions are good, but you have to open yourself up to being the kind of partner who will help a person find themselves not play house




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