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Daywalker (Free verse) by Blade He Stalks
Hunting through every
Darkened street,
Passing by each flickering lamppost.
Hastening to find his soul.
The blood lust rises
Searing blood red anger,
deep behind his eyes.
Up the ladder:
The Red Tree
Down the ladder:
For my darling Lori
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.1944447
Posted: October 10, 2002 2:37 AM PDT; Last modified: October 14, 2002 6:29 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.194544 Overall Rank: 13231 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215
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10-Oct-02/5:30 AM
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No.
Typo last line.
Here's one:
Poemwanker He Writes Mostly in, crayon but it doesn't, matter as it's just crap. Utter tripe. 0/10.
haha. this is pure third legging the hula hoop. you fail. miserably. ha.lol! 0.
HUSH YOUR MOUTH BABA YAGA I THINK THIS POEM IS ACTUALLY VERY GOOD SO F**** YOURSELF DANG.!!!
ANYWAYS GOOD POEM BLADE :)
Hee hee -- so because dear little Maria likes something, we're not allowed to dislike it? And is it not very, very funny that even when she censors her language, she misspells it? 'Fuck' only has three letters after the 'F', dearie.
god we aint all exellent writters you know why do u guys gotta take the mick out of blade man he hasnt done shit to u damnn....
My dea girl, please. We're not all excellent writers, but a large number of us can spell. Which is apparently beyond your intellectual capability. And this particular poem is rather bad. If he eliminated the comma at the end of the second line, even that would increase its value greatly. Though it would still not make it very good. He has done no shit to us than force us to read an extremely bad poem -- the same way that you have done nothing to us but make us read bad poetry, save that you add the insult of atrociously bad spelling to it. Take a basic English course and then we can speak
shut the fuck up!! why the fuck do u have to be so fucking rude i dont give 2 fliyng fucks if u dont like my poetry anywayz i actually express what im feeling what the fuck did i do to you tingtagiles huh? nothing so what if he cant spell u dont have 2 say he sucks we aint all great not even your poetrys good but at least we give it a go but anywayz dont cuss cause im from england and i do know how to spell so hush your mouth aight u cock sucking fool IDIOT WHAT THE FUCK DID I DO TO YOU
I see. I express my opinion and I'm fucking rude, but somehow you're not? You have done nothing but post an godawful comment, misspelled, which I read and found disturbing bad. If your insults had any intelligence or invention to them, I might listen, but they are puerile, cliched spoutings. You do indeed express what you're feeling, but badly. I fail to see why your coming from England should mean I oughtn't to cuss. I'm perfectly willing to believe that you're able to spell and create a grammatically correct sentence, but you'll have to do better than this last post of yours to convince me. Much better. You are an overly sensitive little girl, though I confess a certain amusement at reading you. Especially when you scream at me not to be rude in far ruder language than I ever used on you. All in all, you could rearrange that little rant of yours into a most interesting surrealistic poem with a bit of tweaking. Give it a go, won't you? It couldn't be much worse than what you've done already
You better leave maria alone it was my poem after all and you obviously do not know WHO YOU ARE FUCKING WITH!!!
Try again, please
In case you didn't know I was bring sarcastic. Pleae spare us the pain of anymore poems.
Just because i slagged off yours give you no right to do the same to me its supposed to be on poem quality
DO IT AGAIN AND ILL RIPP OUT YOUR THROAT!!
Poem quality? Ha ha. This poem has no quality.
Certainly I know. A prick who, as I have said elsewhere, doubtless wears a plastic red lined cape, plastic frangs, wears nothing but black and makeup three inches thick. I desperately hope to never be forced to fuck with you.
'Jumped-up pretentious arse...' Certainly. I freely admit it. And I never mock Brits for their spelling. I generally use the British spelling. I only mock bad spelling, in all people, unless they're obvious typos -- which I comment on if they're funny. None of this makes this poem any good.
thx hep cat i know tintagiles i s a fucking bitch god u dont wanna mess with us britains man god!!! lol and by the way any of u mess with blade or hep cat dude youll fucking see it with me aight cause u dont wanna fuck with my friends aight!!! thx hep cat email me at craigdavids_girl2002@hotmail.com
could you please take it outside? nobody gives a fuck about you. or hepcat. or blade. at least tintagiles puts a little effort (and editing) into his writing. you guys seem to just spew and spew and talk shit. this is not attitude ranker. it is poemranker. your friend blade has made an attempt at a poem. in my opinion, he has not developed it fully. i think there was an earlier version (y?) that went further?
as for you, l-a-m, you might want to learn to spell, or maybe you'll save that until you grow up? why do you need to try to verbally intimidate people you will never meet? and if i want to talk shit about the brittons or the asians, no threat of yours will stop me. write a decent poem. that would scare the shit out of me. until then, good day, sirrah.
omg no... 1st of all i didnt cause the asianns or the brittains i actually said tht i went against racism u fool so learn how to read ok and yes i can spell. and all im saying theres no reason why tingatingles or somethinglike tht shpould get rude to blade no ones great ere not even me not even u no one wer'all trying so shut the fuck up u wanker aight and i am grown up probably bigger than u fool
yes. from your reply i see that you are a master of both spelling and grammar. not to mention wit.
i am a wanker! god, you see right through me. and yes, you probably are bigger than me, since i am almost nothing, and only 11. i hardly ever contribute to this site. and, i don't know how to get my point across, or make a joke, or take a joke, or spell, or construct a sentence, or...jesus. why the fuck am i wasting my time? you'll be gone in no time anyway. have a great life, maria. you rule. so does blade. nothing but 10's from here on it. teach me, i am so ignorant, and i obviously can learn from your non-racist wisdom. pretty please.
i see your email is craigdavids_girl2002. who's craig david's girl going to be in 2003? i can't imagine anyone putting up with your towering ignorance for very long (unless craig david is Blade). your mother's cunt smells like carpet cleaner.
hey, i'm already craig david's girl 2003. but i made him go get shots after he was with you.
and unity, dammit, i told you not to lend out my damn vaccuum cleaner. especially not to some barfly.
Who is fucking Craig David. And Who is Craig David and why are you his girl?
i believe maria is fucking craig david. i am not his girl. i was lying. never even hinted at penning me a line, the bastard. me and oedipus went for sushi tonight though. poor boy got some harsh news. such is life.
personally, it's because maria can't take criticism without threatening the criticiser. it just pissed me off, and i vented. i have nothing against either of them. i just want to read poems.
Tsk. My dear girl! Castigating us??? Didn't Mommy ever tell you it's rude to call people names and use the 'F' word?
You fucking bitch God you! More like boring bitch god undergrad genuis drunkard.
You left out 'pedant'.
Did she say pedant? I think not. Go eat your soup before another t-rant.
No, she didn't, but while we're listing off what I am...
There's nothing wrong with being pedantic - it's just attention to detail. Oh, and could somebody explain the feud between Blade, Tintagiles and Maria - every poem one of them has written seems to be followed up by a slanging match from the other two. What's all that about?!?!
Read the slanging matches, they're quite self-explanatory.
I've just read them, and I'm on the fence as regards my view. I see the point you and others have that people should accept the fact that if they're going to put up their work for ranking, they should accept all reviews, good or bad. However, I also see some sense in what Maria and co. are saying, and I feel that it's pointless just to slate something without giving some constructive criticism. In other words, saying something is crap is fine, just say why, and give a few pointers on how to do better next time. Regardless of ability, we're all here to improve, and it would be much better if we were supportive of fellow poets, and helped them to progress, rather than slamming them for the sake of it (although I must admit these skirmishes make for excellent reading!). Ok, rant over!
I just spoke to Hep Cat - he says he doesn't want to get involved with any of this - fight it out amongst yourselves, 'cos he just wants to work on his poems...sob, sob!
match tip the sawdust. my prediction? number nine in worst section within 2 months, at the latest. unvotable regurgitative pelican spew. you'd be better off just scanning the comic book page and posting that. atleast we'd having something in front of us worth reading.
God, won't you guy's please stop bickering...if you haven't noticed the point of this site is to post your poems, and help other peolpe fix theres. Blade, don't listen to some of the asses on this site, It's a nice poem, yes it does need some touchs up, but other than that I like it. I give it a ~*5*~ =)
Yeah! Katie's right! We're a close-knit community of soul-searching poetes! Come on guys, help out Blade and stop poking fun!!
Cheers you guys although i do find the occasional slanging match amusing
Your Sick
You wear plastic fangs, don't you?
No there one hundred percent enameled bone and the're stong enough to rip out your vocal chords any day of the week
Sure you do. However, you should really seek help for this "vampire" delusion of yours. I know people with the same problem and it can be treated.While you're at it, you should learn to spell, and perhaps write a decent poem.
This is either the best troll of all time, or the two biggest morons of all time.
oh come now dark angel.
I just did (this poeme was that good). It'll take a while before I'm ready again.
you will find that i am very a patient woman. i knew this was just the thing to tickle your bum.
QUICK EVERYONE! CONVENE IN THE CHATCAVE!!
Scary, yet great! Well done sir!
let's all face it folks: this poem blows bishops for bus fare and then walks home.
uh oh! don't let maria hear you say that!!!!
You sad sad little boy. When you write this stuff, do you think abouth things like, for instance, the people of who are killed randomly by a sniper? I don't for a minute think that you actually find that cool. So stop writing this stuff. Unless you do find it cool, in which case please seek help before the FBI find you.
Dude i wrote this before the sniper attacks ITS NOT MY FAULT and anyway its poetic licence
only to buy a slurpee..and run home aggoraphobic..with out picking his daily five..only his nose
This is crap
your originality is almost unbearable. almost.
your originality is almost unbearable. almost.
Blade, you really need to get the movie blade out of your head. I bet you know every part of that movie. You and Maria should try not to enjoy the I'm-the-victim, everyone-is-being-mean-to-me rung too much. This is a poetry website. Take a break, like I do. If you wish you could just grab them and shake them, you can't. Besides, you sound extremely dumb and childish (pay attention I didn't say child-like let's not insult children) when you answer criticism with anger and curses. Simply take the criticism, better the poem or get rid of it and start again. Come back when your poems look less like shit(e).
Is it me or is lamp and post supposed to be apart?
Depends how sharp the Blade is
ok how much do you actually know about blade?
How much do you wanna know
I've known Blade for 5 years...he referred me to this site...I see him every day at college...he's one of my best friends...I shattered his porcelain fangs and replaced them with chewing gum...I've voted 0 for all of his poems...how much more do you need to know?
dayFUCKFACEer
you are to soda, what a straw is to ass fucking. did i say soda? i meant cream of wheat.
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