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Free verse № 3270

The Red Tree

by raysaun

Member since 2002 · Posted 7 Jul 2002 · 4 comments

The snow clung to the red tree with the red berries in the winter. As the sun shone the air warmed the snow fell from the tree. I walked under the red tree with the red berries; snowballs fell on me. They say the snow is dry here and normally doesn???t stick to trees but I saw the snow fall from the red tree with the red berries.

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4 comments

[7] AmericanWigeon 7-Jul-02/11:55 AM Reply
mysterious and nice.
[1] deleted user 15-Jul-02/9:13 AM Reply
Imagery good, would have liked a little more depth, a little bit better development of the red symbolism Why are the trees red? What do the berries mean? Why does the word normally seem so out of place?
[5] titan69 9-Aug-02/1:08 PM Reply
I dont see snow much thank you
[5] god'swife 13-Oct-03/7:03 PM Reply
in the last stanza change 'saw' to 'felt'. Also snowballs can only be made my people, not trees. Find some other way to say it.