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The Red Tree (Free verse) by raysaun

The snow clung to the red tree with the red berries in the winter. As the sun shone the air warmed the snow fell from the tree. I walked under the red tree with the red berries; snowballs fell on me. They say the snow is dry here and normally doesn???t stick to trees but I saw the snow fall from the red tree with the red berries.

cyberian54 15-Jul-02/9:13 AM
Imagery good, would have liked a little more depth, a little bit better development of the red symbolism Why are the trees red? What do the berries mean? Why does the word normally seem so out of place?




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