Re: Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/7:50 PM
Better. Juliet didn't drink her death but I don't mind. She did unsheath one happy dagger. Perhaps it should be "my weapon" singular.
Re: Impervious by heart	18-Oct-02/7:47 PM
Very sweet. You must have been in a terific mood when you wrote this.
Re: regret. by darby pyn	18-Oct-02/7:36 PM
Caught between hell and home is fucking fanstastic. this quickly turns to caios at "bored contention..."
Re: a comment on oedipus is raising a pint to me now by <~>	18-Oct-02/7:29 PM
I know darling.
Re: oedipus is raising a pint to me now by <~>	18-Oct-02/7:03 PM
Yea wel,l Oedipus didn't know what he was doing, you on the other hand...
Re: a comment on Hunt by cobalt	18-Oct-02/6:54 PM
See my previous comment, break or burst towards heaven? I want you to take me hunting. I promise I'll be very good.
Re: a comment on Hunt by cobalt	18-Oct-02/3:14 PM
He is in a blind.
Re: a comment on Hunt by cobalt	18-Oct-02/3:12 PM
Uncradled does not bring to my mind unsafe. Are the slivers of blue ducks or bullets? I think ducks. Change shoot to break or burst. what do you think?
Re: Hunt by cobalt	18-Oct-02/1:34 PM
Well done. I don't get 'uncradled'. The rest is perfect. On second thought 'heavenward' seems like it might easily be replaced by something with more impact.
Re: sex by Limness	18-Oct-02/1:30 PM
Ain't it the truth. Young and dumb.
Re: a comment on FHjk by Dark Angle	18-Oct-02/1:19 PM
You mustn't speak of Nigel that way. He's alive and well I can tell you. I snuck into his room last night after you fell asleep, I hope you don't mind.
Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/10:58 AM
Duh, I knew it sounded wrong, oh well. Ummm, he was fucking awesome. Did a few covers, most notably BrownSugar by the Rolling Stones. He was well above lucid. Sharp and to the point. Enjoy.
Re: When Your Best Friend Says You Drink Too Much by jessicazee	18-Oct-02/10:12 AM
Your previous 2 were so good, my expectations are not met with this one, but I can see it in there, like a red speck in an egg. The last stanza is my favorite. Trying starting with that one and see were it leads, Sugar Dumpling.
Re: Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones	18-Oct-02/9:23 AM
I must be in a good mood, everything looks brilliant today. My only peeve is the use of 'time' twice and the end of a line.
Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/9:12 AM
In the beginning of the play Romeo is scolded about his being love sick over another, I forget her name, R something, and then so quickly becoming love sick over Juliet. Can you use that? You'd have to put yourself in Romeo's place.
Re: purple and black gangstaz theme tune by rosiebailey	18-Oct-02/9:07 AM
I love " fastest rapper..." This poem reminds of Langston Hughes. I haven't read him in a while, i should do that. Very good.
Re: a comment on Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/9:02 AM
Yuo could talk abotu his failings, or the trap he has no power to escape.
Re: Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/8:57 AM
What did you change?
Re: the girl what gave scott the look by UAFANTHORPEY	18-Oct-02/8:47 AM
Some of this is brilliant. Soemof this makes me squirm. I'll have to get use to it and come back to it later.
Re: Loosed by <~>	18-Oct-02/8:42 AM
"...bare these sinews" is the only thing that hangs me up here. S3 is gorgeous. Stop running in incestual circles. See some other band. I went to Bob Dylan last night and 2 brothers tried to pick up on me.