Re: Confused by planetdicko	9-Oct-02/7:55 PM
the rhyme scheme of the last stanza has some merit. I suggest you take a writing class. Also find what you love and read it til it falls apart.
Re: Ode to my childhood by nopal	9-Oct-02/8:20 PM
I rather like the first stanza, then it loses it's momentum.
Re: why? by little_angel_maria	9-Oct-02/8:32 PM
I just want to let you know I'm very proud of you for being able to share what happened to you. You should contact www.rainn.org. they'd love to hear from you. Get all the support you need. I know exactly what you're going through.
Re: The Thought Of It by Christof	10-Oct-02/7:23 AM
lines 4,5, & 6 are confusing. The last image I believe would work better if you replaced 'Like' with 'All' the poor dear really is a prisoner.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Oct-02/7:30 AM
Hmmm. The first metaphor using the candle is very good. the second is questionable. I sthe snowflake lost, or destroyed? Senses/tempest is a nice rhyme.
Re: The Thought Of It by Christof	10-Oct-02/7:32 AM
"We were thinking of" you end the line on a preposition, and I my mind expects a new thought afterward.
Re: Daywalker by Blade	10-Oct-02/7:39 AM
Typo last line.
Re: Temptation Stings, Midday Nashville by <~>	10-Oct-02/7:46 AM
I can always count on you to make things interesting. You communicate emotion through concrete images, my favorite.
Re: The Thought Of It by Christof	10-Oct-02/7:50 AM
Oh my, what a difference that makes. Who'd a thunk it.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Oct-02/7:53 AM
You suck.
Re: Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus	10-Oct-02/8:00 AM
I braced myself for the punch, you were certain to deliver.
Re: Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass	10-Oct-02/2:38 PM
Well, someones been doing their exercises. I love the way this piece looks, and also "pumping gas in Manassas" the last lines at the end of S1 & S2 should be eliminated. Lines 3,4, & 5 in S2 need tiobe re-worked slightly. S3 needs to be re-worked. Sounds like a hurried after-thought.
Re: more{Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8	10-Oct-02/2:45 PM
Revolting, but in a good way. Why does porn make me queasy? Should there be parenthesis' around L2 in the 1st Haiku?
Re: the truth about poets by New Life Drug	10-Oct-02/7:10 PM
Are you really 13?
Re: e-mail from a friend by josh_5o	10-Oct-02/11:36 PM
mostly excellent.
Re: Breeze by Nicholas Jones	11-Oct-02/8:18 AM
The middle line speaks to me on several levels, suprisingly. I'm in a sensitive mood.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Oct-02/3:25 PM
You have out poemed the lot. Delicious as figs in cream. Golden threads are not easily broken. I wish I had a girlfriend. To lay my face down in her hair, between her breasts.
Re: Kindling by <~>	11-Oct-02/3:54 PM
he's his mama's sunshine. sweetest cherry in the apple pie. Make him show you how he does it.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Oct-02/3:57 PM
See Untitled III.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Oct-02/11:42 AM
The opposite of poetry, this good sir is science.