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10-Oct-02/6:23 PM |
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I suppose if it means nothing it is worth nothing...
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| Re: dps by decadentlaurel |
10-Oct-02/9:40 PM |
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| Re: dps 2 - new ver. by decadentlaurel |
10-Oct-02/9:43 PM |
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I like version one a tad better, (i say the first is always best because its raw, and meaningful) but this one i like because you've added lines filled with description, which is good, but the atmosphere has dissolved. I especially like the last section and of that "where the blue of her eyes meets gold flowing in every direction such beuty awaits before me still all i see is the ground" very lovely
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| Re: first words by decadentlaurel |
10-Oct-02/9:45 PM |
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This is entitled first words, yet it seems like the end of something.
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| Re: Acknowledgement* by Sigh'ense... |
11-Oct-02/7:48 PM |
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spiritual moccasins.... uh huh...
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| Re: Shadow's First Attempt at Haiku by loneshadow29 |
25-Oct-02/5:18 PM |
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| Re: Drinker's Haiku by cacophony |
25-Oct-02/5:20 PM |
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| Re: Pure by angel_uy |
25-Oct-02/5:21 PM |
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25-Oct-02/5:22 PM |
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I dunno why.. but "melted rice" just gets to me.. haha
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| Re: At the Bottom of a Well by phbiscuit |
1-Nov-02/4:49 PM |
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this is really good. I hate wells though.
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| Re: Jerk ?? Circle by horus8 |
1-Nov-02/4:53 PM |
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how did you get to be such a great poet?
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2-Nov-02/5:33 PM |
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2-Nov-02/5:33 PM |
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2-Nov-02/5:35 PM |
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| Re: untitled by PunchMeInTheFace |
2-Nov-02/5:36 PM |
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| Re: A Cold Day in March by PunchMeInTheFace |
2-Nov-02/5:38 PM |
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reminds me of a song about this girl who was molested. I dont know if she was molested, probably not. But you describe this girl's feelings well so I give it a 8. It was gunna be 7 but since the title is "a day in march" i gave it an 8.
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| Re: Stranger by feathers68 |
2-Nov-02/5:41 PM |
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| Re: Three pointed star by INTRANSIT |
2-Nov-02/5:43 PM |
my haiku is better. HA.
just kidding this is good. but why did it cost many jewish lives? Shouldnt they be saved? 9. three pointed star. as in half of the star of david? Was it torn in half? ahh questions
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26-Nov-02/3:49 PM |
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26-Nov-02/3:54 PM |
that could be a punk song. Some last only 30 seconds. It could be useful had there not been two lines of the some of human kind. A complete waste of words, yet true. I'm so tired of hearing the emptinesses and atrophys of people. Its minotnous tragedy...1
I love your user name though.. Avenging Eskimo.I CHUCKLE
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