Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/12:38 PM
Yes, was thinking that. Its a bit of a quandry though: do you make the poem express the emotion at the expense of making it unenjoyable - I mean this in a global sense, btw; not that yours was necessarily unenjoyable (had some very good parts).
Re: On the Discovery of High Noon and The Devil in a Glass Jar. by MacFrantic	5-May-04/11:37 AM
Help me with "tightly jarred" Good ones, even with my confusion.
Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/8:57 AM
Lateralus in particular.
Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/8:32 AM
Check em out.
Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/8:27 AM
OMG! Blasphemer!! Burn him - BURN HIMMMM!!!
Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/8:17 AM
Under the category of "overshare": Most definitely - I own it, and the rest of her videos, and something like 200 remixes and original versions of her songs. I have really three favorite musical artists and they are: Tool Eagles Bjork (this includes A Perfect Circle and Henley, natch).
Re: a comment on American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/7:48 AM
Don't be messin' with my girl, now.
Re: a comment on Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee	5-May-04/6:48 AM
No worries, I just do that fairly naturally now; took all of eleven seconds.
Re: The Towel Head Blues by horus8	5-May-04/5:49 AM
Strong stuff. Too strong maybe; such a thing may exist. (I'm put off a bit by the language.)
Re: American Idle by wilco	5-May-04/5:46 AM
"fatigue is my color." - very very good. There are so many standard set pieces in here though, I can't decide if its giving it a classic, or a tired feel. Hmmm... That line though, love that.
Re: California triolets by zodiac	5-May-04/5:41 AM
Nice one! Another great use of a form. The repetition with the driving and the smoking and the reading works really well with this travelog feel. A well-deserved Ten.
Re: a comment on Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	4-May-04/9:08 PM
Foundem: Well, my time went to quickly I went lickety-splitly out to my old fifty-five As I pulled away slowly, feelin' so holy, God knows I was feelin' alive And now the sun's comin' up I'm ridin' with Lady Luck Freeway cars and trucks Stars beginning to fade, and I lead the parade Just a wishin' I'd stayed a little longer Lord, don't you know the feelin's gettin' stronger Six in the morning, gave me no warnin' I had to be on my way Now the cars are all passin' me, Trucks are all flashin' me I'm headed home from your place And now the sun's comin' up I'm ridin' with Lady Luck Freeway cars and trucks (minus chorus and bridge)
Re: a comment on Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	4-May-04/9:06 PM
yep, lickety splitly; have you ever actually read the lyrics to that song? I'm gonna go dig those up now (it works as a song, but on paper - whoah. :O)
Re: a comment on Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee	4-May-04/8:56 PM
LoL - a dirty, dirty hoe.
Re: a comment on Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	4-May-04/7:07 PM
talk about writing a song... christ.
Re: a comment on Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	4-May-04/7:04 PM
Don Henley is - one of the best.
Re: a comment on Funeral of My Childhood by Spindle	4-May-04/6:52 PM
Heheh. I guess I lost the memo with the link (okay, its a swan now).
Re: Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee	4-May-04/6:37 PM
Title verb could give you a bit more use prolly. "windy" twice in the first? I'm going to go off on that first stanza some more, no abuse intended. Do you really need to *tell* me it's windy? I mean "hats rolling [down] the sidewalk" do that for you, right? Pretty much - "down" is weak to that end though, but easily replaced with maybe a simile. Can you do something with "Hats" - make it more real, less "movie-like"? Figure all that out and apply to the other stanzas and it will help you with this pattern of saying "here is an event", then proceeding to describe the event; "They were yelling/words were loudly played about" kindof thing. The idea is to not need that first [telling] bit. Btw, I didn't spend all these words because I think this sucks, in fact it has a refined feel, especially toward the end - but there is some noise making it difficult to appreciate fully.
Re: a comment on Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee	4-May-04/6:24 PM
"Any of various plants of the genus Impatiens, which includes the jewelweed." -Or- "A name formerly applied to several varieties of ulcerous cutaneous diseases, but now restricted to Lupus exedens, an ulcerative affection of the nose." (would be nice to have seen some dual usage of the word, but it is a minor player in the piece)
Re: Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	4-May-04/6:12 PM
"inverted Darwinian orgy of sound" wow. De-evolution? Good with punk; well said. As for the rest, I wish you could make it flow a little smoother without creating a dichotomy between the punk rock sound and, well - smooth flow.