Re: Absolution by Drunk Russian Poet	26-Jun-04/3:31 PM
The gene pun is horrible, DRP - I just can't get past that. You may very well be saying some profundity - but if so, you have a clown nose on while doing it.
Re: a comment on afraid by hbhpoems	26-Jun-04/3:25 PM
I guess I should read the comments before I comment - "what he said"
Re: afraid by hbhpoems	26-Jun-04/3:25 PM
hi hbh, if that's your real name. This does express the description of fear - but I'm always more comfortable with a poem that expresses fear itself. How do you feel when you feel afraid? Describe some of that abuse - use some poetic devices, paint a picture. Make me feel it without telling me what to feel? Can you do that?
Re: a comment on Sustained by Dovina	26-Jun-04/1:29 PM
Have a good trip. You should consider packing some blank paper along with your dictionary.
Re: a comment on Sustained by Dovina	26-Jun-04/11:45 AM
Do you also have a degree in "clothes-wearing" from an accredited "clothes-wearing" educational institution? Perhaps you instead have many years of "clothes-wearing" (under your belt) or have observed many "clothes-wearing" people who have shown through critical acclaim or other virtue that they are prime examples of fine "clothes-wearing"; this enabling you to judge Melissa's art or science. Either way, a cleverly fashioned, if not wholely sensible comment - how are you doing with that whole "writing poetry" thing? Done much of that lately?
Re: Sustained by Dovina	26-Jun-04/8:40 AM
"Semptember smog" is a very nice combo. the ending is good, but I'm left wondering, despite the pleasant impression, what this is about.
Re: Small Town, January by zenhaircut	23-Jun-04/7:18 PM
good one.
Re: Tulips for Penelope by zenhaircut	23-Jun-04/7:16 PM
Artfully done, but a tad long for a first exposure. I would need to be a fan to commit to such a lengthy verse, and as it is, I admit to skimming toward the end there. I hope the others are more accessible - but this one; very nice anyway. (a few typos, btw - a quick spell check will reveal them)
Re: I Shall Fight by Torok	22-Jun-04/1:26 PM
I like this (well, no crazy about the lowercase "i"'s) - for me it stays on the right side of honest introspection.
Re: a comment on Time Imperfect by MacFrantic	21-Jun-04/7:58 PM
okay, got it. I was fooled by the shirtless cowboys in the previous line. I guess it ties better with the following line. tx.
Re: a comment on Rosalía de Castro: When I was born by Sasha	21-Jun-04/7:56 PM
Not read that one - any good?
Re: Johnny by MacFrantic	21-Jun-04/6:44 PM
I seem to be late and lone in my opinion, but this was effectively captivating.
Re: Bankruptcy by INTRANSIT	21-Jun-04/6:40 PM
heheh - this is good.
Re: a comment on Rosalía de Castro: When I was born by Sasha	21-Jun-04/6:29 PM
Btw, I think you would enjoy the book called "Baudolino" by Umberto Eco. I'm 2/3rds through it; very good. He has a couple other non-fiction things on semiotics that would be right up your alley.
Re: a comment on Rosalía de Castro: When I was born by Sasha	21-Jun-04/6:25 PM
oh, okay. Makes sense - I was just going for the sound of it - but really, it's fine as is.
Re: Worlds Worst Poem by Brittanyy	21-Jun-04/6:24 PM
definitely not the world's worst line B: "Now she's getting jealous cuz Im sleeping in your shirt." There is something universally appealing about a woman in a man's shirt. fourth stanza rocks - I think it should be the last one (kill the last stanza).
Re: On the Discovery of Simple Sam and A Russian Catastrophe by MacFrantic	21-Jun-04/6:19 PM
Quite nice, both.
Re: Center Of The Universe by Dovina	21-Jun-04/6:15 PM
That last line... I was thinking that if you want to keep it, maybe saying a specific kind of bug would add quite a bit. Like "a stinkbug"; "no matter, it was only a stinkbug"
Re: Time Imperfect by MacFrantic	21-Jun-04/6:10 PM
Mac-Daddy-Fan, nice job. I wouldn't mind seeing a version that is less of a series of snapshots, less list-like. should "bearing" be "baring" as in exposing themselves? So, although I'd prefer a bit more flow, these ideas leave some solid impressions anyway.
Re: Quiet, Kind Hills by Dovina	21-Jun-04/6:03 PM
nice to see "ringforts"