regarding some deleted poem...	18-Apr-04/5:24 AM
I really like the puffer fish bit - never seen or considered that and it presents a solid image.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Apr-04/6:19 AM
Quite excellent. Slight pause on "errant hunches" - maybe you can beef that up? A ten anyway.
Re: Do You Like It by hotwire	19-Apr-04/3:05 PM
Would that it could be top 40
Re: genome home zone by sarah	19-Apr-04/3:08 PM
catchy, clever title. kill "of the genome" "with the want for a familar" to "with want of familiar" - and a very good use of "familiar", too. I think the ending doesn't do it justice - I know you know what you mean, but the promise of the beginning isn't followed through with this confessional wrap-up. Know what I mean - one doesn't follow the other; this ending could be tacked onto anything.
Re: The Flame by Fire_is_cool	19-Apr-04/3:09 PM
no. When I like the user name more than the poem, something is broken.
Re: carnivalesque by sarah	19-Apr-04/3:11 PM
"painted like a dali painting" pick a painting and kill the other. This is, otherwise, pimple - not a bad one though.
Re: Sport by MacFrantic	19-Apr-04/4:45 PM
olympic dogfighting?
Re: The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi	19-Apr-04/5:00 PM
quite an ambitious ditty - but I think too long? Still, enjoyable enough!
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Apr-04/5:02 PM
a riddle-like quality.
Re: From Treehouse To Factory by Shardik	19-Apr-04/5:08 PM
The set up is out of proportion to the delivery, but the language is solid enough. Something to think about if you ever do a rewrite.
Re: innocent voyeur by nentwined	19-Apr-04/5:10 PM
that last line, man. what can be done?
Re: stranger by francis nor capule	19-Apr-04/5:14 PM
"really really glad" is you makin' fun of poetry?? are you mocking me? HUH PRETTY-BOY - are you mockin ME??
Re: Laundry by mindsigns	19-Apr-04/6:00 PM
This is a "concrete", and they are so few and, well, f a r between, that I'm gonna give you an 8.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Apr-04/6:04 PM
this has some logic errors, like how would I (cuz I know you are talking to me) know if your blood didn't suit my taste if it then goes un-tasted? Or something. Plus it sounds like another suicide poem[e].
Re: questions by ggawrysi	20-Apr-04/7:49 AM
is "How was it done?"
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Apr-04/8:00 AM
Did the search, but being at work was afraid to click some links - is it gross? Will it be more gross than a pineal cyst? Cuz, so far that tips my scales at horrific.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Apr-04/10:41 AM
this is not iambic pentameter. sonnets never have the word "soft" okay, had to do that /joke mode off It's unusual for a sonnet to have a refrain line - and I like that. None of the rhymes feel forced, which is cool. Downside: the last line doesn't make sense to me. Its a strong line and alone it makes a nice finish - but how it fits in the context is lost on my small human brain. Still - a nine in my book.
Re: questions by ggawrysi	20-Apr-04/11:58 AM
the answer, btw, is always "with mirrors"
Re: #20 by mikejedw	20-Apr-04/12:07 PM
haiku shouldn't ryme, roundeye (nor should they really sound "poetic"). I'm serious, I didn't make this crap up. Change "feet" to "knees", and it will make more sense with "creeps" - unfortunately you are still stuck with the rhyme. dunno. have a 7
Re: reflection by xunitedx	20-Apr-04/12:10 PM
nice complex internal and end-rhymes. ballys - s/b "ballets"