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27-Dec-02/1:23 PM |
second sentence 'my' to might.
maybe break this one into stanzas, and let it find it's own gravity..it seem hesitant at first than it goes into seizures..not as powerful as your fist poem today, but it regains its composure rightfully enough.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
27-Dec-02/1:25 PM |
always trust the gut and nose. before the heart and penis. the brain will follow.
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Re: A Short Letter by Ranger |
27-Dec-02/3:33 PM |
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Re: Return to Kadath by razorgrin |
27-Dec-02/4:02 PM |
the eye of sarnath sees all.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
27-Dec-02/4:19 PM |
what have you acertained thus far? only that your ass is quite hollow and whistles unwarrented on windy days. you sound like a wet sneaker fleeing in the night down the hall of fruitiness...pear shaped ass sparking madly of the sides of political correctness like a over budgeted disney car chase..tsk. where is bo and luke duke when we need them.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
27-Dec-02/4:28 PM |
comma after control.
comma after catalyst.
cap Eros. A purist or i move.
i reel in my torso.
inducing my influence like a shot.
comma after side to side, i raise insanity. Flexing centers of desire. lower back, a dynamic joint. of a modest room *[makes it more universal] i was a born a dancer. creatint the following, of one. The love of my life
*don't include brackets (inside is my point only).
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27-Dec-02/5:01 PM |
sean you are a sick man. nice field of toiling wheat though. breakfast of champions.
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Re: me, Deep-as-a-puddle and the elusive connection by lunar |
28-Dec-02/2:02 PM |
pain is a living mongoose scrotum adorning fashion attachment. ALL ELSE is shower curtain hoops.p
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28-Dec-02/7:55 PM |
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Re: When I wake... by Topaz Servias |
28-Dec-02/8:00 PM |
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28-Dec-02/8:03 PM |
jesus christ you're fucking amazing, and your shimmy...geez, it glistens like a slug on a beer can.???
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Re: Drinker's Haiku by cacophony |
28-Dec-02/8:05 PM |
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Re: Shackles of Reality by rick |
28-Dec-02/8:05 PM |
no rick, but your face is.b
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regarding some deleted poem... |
29-Dec-02/2:29 PM |
don't hate my face, hate my nipples and my handcrafted mail box.
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Re: Diseases dug out with acceptance and the futility of analyzation unless it's at a poetic discourse by A. Nomaly |
29-Dec-02/2:34 PM |
<poets should not be doctors> invisible ink, and tofu.
SWAGGER AWARD FOR HERBAL IMPLAMENTATIONS AND CONIFERS.
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Re: Bumming kiddies by Bobjim |
30-Dec-02/1:01 PM |
again i must block. you see, i'm a semipermeable membrane, and since you didn't bum the cat. no osmosis
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Re: The Eskimo and the fish by INTRANSIT |
30-Dec-02/3:43 PM |
purity at it's finest, almost too pure maybe..it needs a little more line, but barely.
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Re: Alone by shwenatjadeflower |
2-Jan-03/5:01 PM |
bestrew and gentile in the same poem, remarkable. have and eight. shall we date?i
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Re: ... by logun2002ya |
2-Jan-03/6:54 PM |
no.actually..that's perfectly natural.
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Re: Bliss Eternal by Freethinker1602 |
2-Jan-03/8:06 PM |
exculpate at once, then sand your left leg to varnish with 150 grain paper. surfing trip to costa rica also work wonders. if this is true, good. if not, you should move to italy, and become an aids activist. seriously. my friend just got out of the peace corp, and i watched him turn a loaf of bread into a hovercraft complete with a banquet of swine spitted goodies and sani huts..truly..it was fucking mind boggling, but as luck would have it's always about 'pork' no 'copper'. maybe he should try a mracle were he turn a pillow case full of euro's into a vat of mercury, than we'll sell the mercury for hard cash for venezualain oil and thirteen year old hookers. whatta ya think. too cryptic? yeah, probably.
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