| Re: Returneth by Patsy |
4-Jan-04/12:05 AM |
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At this early hour, the poem's dichotomies seem tender, the self-interrogation nearly gentle. With the light of day the edges may turn hard and unjust, i know, but at the moment... Honest to (nearly) the core, i appreciate.
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| Re: (pieces, peaces) by Patsy |
4-Jan-04/12:24 AM |
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Again, this is possibly simply the fact of the near-full moon, but...intimations of the Other Side? or, to quote, "dustbunnies where there are none"?
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| Re: More same than before by Patsy |
4-Jan-04/12:26 AM |
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...they need point-fives when voting.
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5-Jan-04/12:28 AM |
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| Re: Benedict Arnold by Justone |
18-Jan-04/10:48 PM |
"crystal smoke", "cardboard beneath", "slit my balloon, bleeding red as i fell"---these scintillate.
"glimpse of past/lessons for future": too much approaching clichee. but, overall, good. salutations.
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| Re: it's all about the aeroplanes by Patsy |
18-Jan-04/11:38 PM |
Snarkily enough, i was about to not-do anything out of caprice at not having a juicy walking-stick. but being gentle is good too, and so i do so in the end anyways.
You ascend higher in terms of all. i await future years with expectatory heart-leaps.
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| Re: Last Night by middenHeap |
21-Jan-04/1:26 PM |
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21-Jan-04/1:30 PM |
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i like the first half better.
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| Re: Fall of all by penguin fiend |
21-Jan-04/1:31 PM |
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hmm yes. know what you mean. what about constructive interference?
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| Re: The back of a shovel? by horus8 |
21-Jan-04/1:33 PM |
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hmm. imagery is intense, at any rate. for whatever that's worth. ^_^
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21-Jan-04/8:34 PM |
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Some of the rest doesn't quite fit with me, but "...beneath a canescent moon" and "for in death/ we are protean's pulse": of these i like.
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| Re: Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing |
21-Jan-04/8:36 PM |
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Hmm. The thoughts are well-held in the beginning and end, but the phraseology might have been a little more flexible in the middle-part.
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| Re: P.M.S. by Princess_Snowflake |
22-Jan-04/6:35 AM |
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31-Jan-04/1:47 PM |
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yes! i relate, living nearby what is (supposedly) one of the fastest-growing (spawning?) spots in all of Canada.
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31-Jan-04/1:49 PM |
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Image conveyed in totality. Our lives these days are filled with meaningless words--this is just right.
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31-Jan-04/1:53 PM |
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31-Jan-04/1:56 PM |
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| Re: collars i have worn--exhibit 3 by Patsy |
11-May-04/8:21 AM |
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hmm. first things first---dare i say it? i demand the you!
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| Re: today i just feel like swearing alot. But i won't. by Patsy |
9-Aug-04/12:09 PM |
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Much too many questions this raises.
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| Re: Guess the place! by Patsy |
17-Aug-04/10:04 PM |
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this, i think, goes further than other-of-i-have-seen. the "Maas" makes me want to guess in that direction, but i feel cautious tonight...
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