Re: (getting used to spending too much time with myself) by Patsy	13-Aug-03/2:53 PM
Very ... now? present? here? not quite sure *what*, exactly, but it's there. In general, alive. no "pretenses", at any rate.
Re: why am i still thinking about blood? by Patsy	13-Aug-03/2:57 PM
hrm. for some reason, i liked "unburden" much better. the last line is more *you*, i think, than most of the rest.
Re: trying to cross the border to Sweetgrass by Patsy	13-Aug-03/3:02 PM
the first half, especially, resonates.
Re: (The vinyards of Tuscany) by Patsy	13-Aug-03/3:03 PM
i "like".
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Aug-03/9:57 PM
beautiful not necessarily in the use of words or precision of language, but in the idea it provides the contours of. something i have felt as well. kudos.
Re: The Well by Caducus	13-Aug-03/10:04 PM
Great. More elaboration on the last four lines, perhaps, might have added something still more? Just a thought.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Aug-03/11:22 AM
beautiful.
Re: Troublemaker by Patsy	31-Aug-03/7:15 AM
this, as a whole, eclipses most else i've read of yours. an aura of...tenderness, perhaps? i've forgotten the exact word, at the moment, but inverted paternalism is what i'm trying to get to. many more questions, though: is it based on a specific person? the..err..rest of the questions will have to wait till later, because i must zoomph into offline mode. ~ again, thank you.
Re: Troublemaker by Patsy	31-Aug-03/7:20 AM
also, though: the title? "troublemaker"?
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-03/10:08 AM
lumdadeedum.
Re: 30,000 feet by Patsy	14-Sep-03/3:45 PM
"your lights, my stars"...i'm probably reading more into this than i should, but i find it rather meaningful. this profundity is of another type than the rest of your poem, so if i were to quote it in my style of profundity, i'd not contextualize. :) but, the same holds true for "i am in love with the beauty of your / ignorance" and for that matter, "only your intersections / mark". when fit with the rest of it, the external meaning i've added jars, somewhat.. but taken as a whole, i'd leave you with an 8.
Re: Recycle by Patsy	14-Sep-03/4:09 PM
"i am between your Seine and your Rhine"... ah. if i might dare utter something akin to blasphemy, i'd say that's nearly better than whipped cream. :) the rest of it, though.. other than "i am just with the rain..." and a few other gems.. when i remember you're capable of "Troublemaker"...i don't know.. it's just.. at the moment, when i'm somewhat sleepy, i'd be more liable to give it a [we're sorry: it seems as though the user has left the workstation as he fears giving the poem cited a vote he will later regret. please try again later.]
Re: Recycle by Patsy	2-Nov-03/7:40 AM
yowee. I apologize for the previous comment--now, a month and a half later, I come back to this, and it strikes me as very, very "good". It's just a month and a half too old for me, that's all. :)
Re: My Instructions or My Tongue In My Cheek? by Patsy	2-Nov-03/7:42 AM
My commentating will come, yet! If I am free on Thursday, perhaps. But, until then, I must take pride in this poem, note the correlations to Francis' "Summons", and continue on...
Re: Borders II by Patsy	2-Nov-03/7:49 AM
Well, to leave this out would be too...conspicuous :), and so, I am here. I shall say simply that the internal stirrings this implies are not unknown to my precincts. And now, I shall leave the confessional, and go about my work. they really should have the option of point-fives when voting--I'm always caught between rounding up or rounding down.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Nov-03/7:52 AM
You're right--it lacks the "sympathy" Mann spoke of, though to my own mind is very exact, very precise, and of wordings fine.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Nov-03/8:17 AM
This might be seen more as a collection of thought on a single individual than a poem connecting directly together. In any case, some allusions: --The first two lines are from Wordsworth's "Ode" --Fariduddin Attar was a Persian mystic-poet of the Islamic tradition many centuries ago. One of his greatest works was called The Conference of the Birds-- about birds who set out to search for a King. After many trials on their travels, they discovered that each held the King within itself...in metaphor of God, the story takes on meaning beyond simple comprehension. --Telemachus, of course, is the son of Odysseus. --"take you to see ice": the first line of Marquez's 100Years: "Many years later, as he faced the firing squad, Colonel Aureliano Buendio remembered the distant day when his father took him to discover ice." This first line plunges the reader into the cyclic pattern of damnation and redemption which goes through the whole book. --horizontal/vertical axes: all of life being graphed on such a scale: the vertical axis holds all that is of insight and "depth", while the horizontal is plain experience. The correlation between true understanding and mere knowledge or information, if you will. --"This is my way--that yours": reference to: "...Say: "O ye who deny the truth! I do not worship that which you worship, and neither do you worship that which I worship. ... Unto you, your way, and to me, mine!"..."
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Nov-03/8:24 AM
Intense. Very.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Nov-03/8:26 AM
Ha! The last line clinches all! I salute you.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Nov-03/8:30 AM
The theme is clear enough--but the individual examples are interpretable enough in the inverse that I am happy. Appreciated.