on Performer by http://mulberryfairy
23 Aug 2003, 11:11 AM
Sweet child, interesting experience. LOVE
on some deleted poem
16 Sep 2003, 3:51 PM
sounds like there's some guilt behind the pleasure of the apple juice and masturbating, yes?
on some deleted poem
15 Sep 2003, 5:37 PM
Joe-joe, Joe-joe, you just can't write,
Joe-joe, Joe-joe, try as you might.
Joe-joe, Joe-joe, you numb Jesus freak,
Joe-joe, Joe-joe, you poemranker geek.
J-j, J-j, you make no sense,
J-j, J-j, you are so dense.
Joe-joe, Joe-joe, try as you might.
Joe-joe, Joe-joe, you numb Jesus freak,
Joe-joe, Joe-joe, you poemranker geek.
J-j, J-j, you make no sense,
J-j, J-j, you are so dense.
on A new beginning by hobojo
16 Sep 2003, 3:46 PM
I liked the sweating part, but it needs more sex.
on Upside down and tigers by horus8
16 Sep 2003, 3:48 PM
Is it tigers that have forked penises?
on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2003, 9:42 AM
OK, then, what can I do to make it better??
on Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy
1 Sep 2003, 2:23 PM
No offense, but is remorselessly a word?
One question: are you in love?
One question: are you in love?
on Part I: The Peach by http://mulberryfairy
1 Sep 2003, 2:25 PM
I liked your statement "I guess that was that," but I want to know more. What else were you feeling? Relief that it was over? Not wanting it to be over?
on some deleted poem
1 Sep 2003, 2:27 PM
Did you feel like you had been "picked clean" - by him or yourself? Was the squirrel a metaphor for something?
on Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy
1 Sep 2003, 2:30 PM
I love the imagery here. I really felt this one.
Was the desire to have something delicious all to yourself?
Was the desire to have something delicious all to yourself?
on some deleted poem
27 Aug 2003, 4:18 PM
Please be gentle, I'm all vulnerable in love.
on summer heat blues by peaceseeker
25 Aug 2003, 8:32 AM
I'm glad you liked it, it's still a little bit of a "scratchy" one.
A "hermaphrodite pickle" is a penis that is so small, the man could be considered a hermaphrodite.
A "hermaphrodite pickle" is a penis that is so small, the man could be considered a hermaphrodite.
on 8:45 AM Dentist Appointment by http://mulberryfairy
23 Aug 2003, 10:57 AM
Did you have a cleaning on the same day, after finding her in your closet?
on Voluptuous, Blonde Bird-Woman by http://mulberryfairy
23 Aug 2003, 10:59 AM
and after you "climb into her nestbed" ??
on Ode to a Pizza Hut Roach by http://mulberryfairy
23 Aug 2003, 11:02 AM
I have roaches in my building, for the first time in my life. Some have, like, twenty legs, long antennae, and spots.
I would describe the roaches.
I would describe the roaches.
on Phone Support: To Lee by http://mulberryfairy
23 Aug 2003, 11:08 AM
Sweet friendship, but, isn't this a perfect example of how we're set up to not be close with the ones we love?
on Performer by http://mulberryfairy
23 Aug 2003, 11:11 AM
Sweet child, interesting experience. LOVE
on some deleted poem
29 Aug 2003, 8:24 AM
Advice? Should I boycott his hot bar?
on Plastic is Forever by http://mulberryfairy
14 Sep 2003, 8:46 AM
Can you say more about the bruising?
I imagine the mention of bruising has more significance than just its physicality on the arm.
What are your thoughts on the friend's fervorous grip, and the narrator's bruising?
I imagine the mention of bruising has more significance than just its physicality on the arm.
What are your thoughts on the friend's fervorous grip, and the narrator's bruising?
on body image by http://mulberryfairy
27 Sep 2003, 2:34 PM
It's interesting to me the way you related the suicide to the work-out class. I would like to see more about how the two are similar.
Very well written, a perfect 10.
Very well written, a perfect 10.