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Free verse № 65063

Plastic is Forever

by http://mulberryfairy

Member since 2003 · Posted 13 Sep 2003 · 14 comments

“These are priceless” she says, sneaking another glance, gushing a genuine giggle at our third identical set of $9.95 Excalibur keychains. Each action portrait begs remembrance of all previous rides on "the 4.5 acre wooden roller coaster" this 2003 season: I, with the same farmers’ tan where my shirtsleeves have parachuted up; an afro of rattled, windblown hair framing an androgynous face. She with her mouth open, breasts spilling over my forearm; whitened fingers clenching my bicep with such fervor that you can almost see the bruising in these immortalized, plastic-ized, mementos.

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14 comments

[n/a] http://mulberryfairy 13-Sep-03/9:34 PM Reply
Suggestions for "plastic-ized"? I imagine it sounding like plastisized, but don't think it is a word, and taking out the "c" makes it seem unclear-er.

[9] Goad › http://mulberryfairy 26-Jan-04/2:31 PM Reply
plasticized is most definitely a word, without the hyphen, and it is pronounced plastisized. It is often also spelled plasticised.
[0] baphomet 13-Sep-03/9:47 PM Reply
im sorry buckelberryferry
this sucks shit.
3char1per
0.
[n/a] Geschäftsreise › baphomet 13-Sep-03/11:05 PM Reply
Please forgive me I am new. You must be the same person as this supremebeaner, supremedreamer, and The third isis, as well as being baphomet. Why do you critique poetry without critiquing it?
[0] baphomet › Geschäftsreise 14-Sep-03/8:03 PM Reply
I think not.
I use a school computer.
That is why there is the same comp. number.
[10] Lifeboatman › baphomet 14-Sep-03/8:53 PM Reply
fool..
[n/a] Geschäftsreise 13-Sep-03/11:02 PM Reply
This poem has an interesting tension between 1.) being marketed 'fun' (plus the narrator's friend's ability to enjoy it in spite of the commercialization) and 2.) Your apparent objective indifference to (or even slight critique of) the whole thing.
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy › Geschäftsreise 14-Sep-03/1:42 PM Reply
I worked hard on that objective indifference, and "apparent" is right- nice distinction. Was it effective?
[8] <~> › http://mulberryfairy 15-Sep-03/10:59 AM Reply
very.

and plastcized, is a word, per dictionary.com:
plas·ti·cize ( P ) Pronunciation Key (plst-sz)
tr. & intr.v. plas·ti·cized, plas·ti·ciz·ing, plas·ti·ciz·es

To make or become plastic
[10] peaceseeker 14-Sep-03/8:46 AM Reply
Can you say more about the bruising?
I imagine the mention of bruising has more significance than just its physicality on the arm.
What are your thoughts on the friend's fervorous grip, and the narrator's bruising?
[9] nentwined 14-Sep-03/7:36 PM Reply
I like this. could use some spit and polish, but I'm not quite sure where. 9.
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy › nentwined 15-Sep-03/9:25 AM Reply
Yeah, I know, that is how I feel about it too.
[10] Lifeboatman 14-Sep-03/8:53 PM Reply
good.. 10
[7] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 15-Sep-03/3:17 PM Reply
Have you ever stopped to think what an amzing feat of technology it is to be able to make a plastic keyring? Could you make a plastic keyring? Two hundred years ago you'd probably be worshipping it as some sort of god.