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Plastic is Forever (Free verse) by http://mulberryfairy

“These are priceless” she says, sneaking another glance, gushing a genuine giggle at our third identical set of $9.95 Excalibur keychains. Each action portrait begs remembrance of all previous rides on "the 4.5 acre wooden roller coaster" this 2003 season: I, with the same farmers’ tan where my shirtsleeves have parachuted up; an afro of rattled, windblown hair framing an androgynous face. She with her mouth open, breasts spilling over my forearm; whitened fingers clenching my bicep with such fervor that you can almost see the bruising in these immortalized, plastic-ized, mementos.

peaceseeker 14-Sep-03/8:46 AM
Can you say more about the bruising?
I imagine the mention of bruising has more significance than just its physicality on the arm.
What are your thoughts on the friend's fervorous grip, and the narrator's bruising?




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