| Re: Provacation by J.B. Manning |
20-Aug-03/5:05 PM |
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I'm pro-vacation too. I would like to take this moment to celebrate the end of my 90 day probationary period at my current job. Anyway, you don't need "sort-of" in front of gestation. Interesting piece.
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20-Aug-03/5:13 PM |
I got the metaphor of the coffee cup candle, but it seemed like a typo of handle at first glance. Good though, I like the language. You could use an apostrophe in "lawn's"- did you mean "lawn's open plain"?
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| Re: A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
21-Aug-03/6:15 PM |
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You forgot private, for-profit prisons (if you have money to invest in stock, and you don't care about what atrocities you are encouraging, this is the place to make some money) and the psychologists and social workers who evaluate the convicted murderers when the death penalty is in question. S'quite lucrative.
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21-Aug-03/6:20 PM |
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| Re: True Respect (A Distant Adoration) by abecedarian |
1-Sep-03/8:18 AM |
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Beautiful. I like "buzzing mass of fickle need". But then, I'm fickle.
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1-Sep-03/8:21 AM |
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I love your food and love images together. I would like to hear even more about the food.
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1-Sep-03/8:24 AM |
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Take out the question mark after see and leave the one after "sexily bike messanging". Why is "vegan" in quotation marks, is there some doubt that his ingredients are animal free? I think I know this man you are talking about (if indeed this is fact, not fiction) - has the initials of NH and long dread locks? We'll talk.
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| Re: Shi by William Delacroix |
1-Sep-03/8:39 AM |
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What a waste of your recyclable organs, to publish the product on poemranker, where all poems, even the worst of them, are underappreciated. Anyway, I think it was a great poem- but wouldn't kill myself for its writing. 10
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| Re: Untitled by greym0on |
1-Sep-03/8:51 AM |
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beautiful, even if it is overly gushy.
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| Re: Untitled II by greym0on |
1-Sep-03/8:56 AM |
"Your arms that were just long enough
to wrap around me" - this didn't quite work for me, made me think that this love of your was a small child.
It is a good thing I am in a dramatic & romatic mood today- 9
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| Re: Nothing by greym0on |
1-Sep-03/8:59 AM |
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At least this unrequited love is good fuel for poetry.
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| Re: Ohio's Dirty Natives by Fear of Garbage |
1-Sep-03/9:07 AM |
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Awesome. I liked the repetition and the flow of the poem and the precise descriptions.
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1-Sep-03/9:09 AM |
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should say "I've run away"- but no need to delete your poetry.
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1-Sep-03/9:12 AM |
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Nice. I love those images, and how you've placed the corpse in a prison of mute desire for your enviable possessions.
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| Re: A Cacodemon's Sermon: Message to a Eudemon by Y2kSlamPoet |
1-Sep-03/11:38 AM |
This is my favorite part: "The love of pure killing
incites me to rush
in close, to enjoy
the feel of skin
quickly turned
into dark colors. "
Nice, but could use a few apostrophes.
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| Re: Happy 29. a little late by A. Nomaly |
2-Sep-03/10:43 AM |
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| Re: justly now included by A. Nomaly |
2-Sep-03/10:45 AM |
Abuelita? Little grandmother?
I like your style.
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| Re: Restraint by Retaliate |
2-Sep-03/10:52 AM |
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"Yuki" indeed! At least my narrator did it in the car. Be considerate, you snake. But you did provoke some nostalgia for me, you know, the good old days of having sex in college dormrooms while roommates "sleep".
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| Re: I'm going back to art school by TanHand |
2-Sep-03/11:01 AM |
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You did architecture studios twice. You are right about the acceptance level at art school, I used to work at "MECA" with my hairy legs.
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2-Sep-03/11:04 AM |
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Step away from the hashish and nobody gets hurt!
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